Right Away, Great Captain

Right Away, Great Captain

A Poem by surething
"

I am your Devil Dressed in Blue...

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I just read our old conversations
The ones that you most likely do not remember.
It was almost a year ago,
I can still taste that strawberry kiss.

I realized how dumb I was
For actually thinking you loved me.
Sure, you might have cared,
But you did such just as a careless wanderer.

Im not your devil dressed in blue any longer.
Im not who I used to be.
I finally have realized the such,
And I am glad you have stayed out of my dreams.

© 2015 surething


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Nicely written! One suggestion would be to replace "strawberry kiss". It is very popularly used and a little too cliche for my personal taste. Other than that, I have to say I enjoyed it :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


surething

8 Years Ago

Well I literally meant strawberry kisses because he had just drank Redd's Strawberry Ale. Thanks!
I really like this poem. Time and space allow us to see the truth of the emotions that swirled around us so chaotically during the storm of the relationship. Here, you show how once the storm is over and you have some distance from it you can see what it really was. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ahh, the moment of realisation when you notice the times between thoughts of them are growing longer and having less and less effect on you. Beautifully captured.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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I am a typical adult-child who sees everything through rose colored glasses. Please don't make fun of my addiction for silly nonsense. I have an obsession with Alice in Wonderland, and I wish I co.. more..

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