Twirling

Dance to the beat of your own drums

Heart racing,

chest pounding,

swirling and twirling,

and dancing to the beat

of the music.

Dress spinning,

sunset shining,

slapping my feet,

and dancing through the night,

like nobody is watching.

My body flows,

like a deep blue river,

twisting and falling,

beautiful and yet mysterious.

Let people think,

what they want to think.

Who I am to stop them?

They can stand still,

and let life pass them by.

While I will be here,

smiling and laughing,

and dancing to the beat,

of my own drums.

Reviews

[Kaleb T. Clare]

First thing ... I love it!

You grabbed me in to the dance and had me there dancing with the sand beat right from the first stanza. Your choice of words and even the placement of each one within the stanzas is incredibly well selected.

One thing only I would look at for a possible slight word positioning... "Who I am to stop them?" Perhaps you intended exactly how you worded it but that is the only place I "stumbled", and found the wording ackward. If YOU intended that wording I'd stick with it. Another choice using the same words might be, "Who am I to stop them?" [just inverting the "I am" to "am I". Just a thought [smile]. Other than this slight adjustment I would keep it exactly as you wrote your muse on living your life exactly as your own innate spirit inspires you [smile].

[HipsterPrincess17]

Not bad! this is a start of something big you have a lot of potential! Nice work (;

[rosa]

I like it very original and unique:)

[zainul]

This is a splendid work.
It is quite wise to respond to the call of one's own heart.

[katnisscat]

like the end where it says :dancing to the beat, of my own drums. Which is true. You make your own beat in life.

[Antwannette]

This is great. I like your wording. It's very inspiring.