Infinite Moment

I held her in my arms

bundled in a faded towel discolored and tatty

from countless washes and years

enveloping sopping children and soggy dogs

in its warm embrace.

 

I held her in my arms

gasping for breath

frail chest heaving in and out

in great shuddering wheezes

each breath rattling

reverberating

ringing through her trembling body

air gurgling and hissing

in and out of her spluttering lungs.

 

I held her in my arms

body sagging

head lolling feebly

too desperately weak

to hold herself up.

 

I held her in my arms

bloodless lips silently gaping

ashen grey

as though the life had already left.

 

I held her in my arms

eyes wide with horror

dazed and unseeing

clouded by fear.

 

I held her in my arms

careening towards the end

at a dizzying speed

stumbling

wildly out of control

too sudden

too soon.

 

I held her in my arms

heart thrashing against its confines

panicked and convulsing

as its last beat loomed nearer

emerging from the shadows

towering over us

waiting to wrench her from me.

 

I held her in my arms

suspended in time

frozen in the infinite moment

spanning an eternity and an instant

between being and nonbeing

between life and death.

 

I held her in my arms

fading out of existence

leaving me

alone

with nothing but memories

of what once was

but no longer is.

 

I held her in my arms

one second there

and the next

gone.

 

I tried to hold her in my arms

but she was no longer there.

Author's Note

This is the first poem I've ever written, and I'd really love some feedback/constructive criticism on it please. Anything really; I don't really know that much about poetry and I'm not very good at it, so any advice/suggestions would be great. Also, I'm pretty iffy about the title of the poem, so if anyone has a better idea/suggestion, that'd be wonderful. Thank you!

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

I must say you are intelligent, most people start writing poetry with making rhyme schemes and meters etc but you have done it in a free verse which allowed you use many thoughts here... I loved your use of vocabulary, you have created an intensity throughout the poem that really stands out... It really flows well and believe me while reading it I never had the idea that this is your first poem.... I enjoyed the concept here... In my opinion "held her in my arms" could be a good title....

Sincerely,
Dhiman