Check, please

Check, please

A Poem by Libby McKeown

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There

is

no

black

or wrong or right

white

only

a

[vast]

 

 

G               R               E               Y

 

hunting

ground.

 

© 2010 Libby McKeown




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Ah, this was wonderful. I love it when poetry has a physical form. People don't do that very often, it's kind of refreshing. And the message, of course, is also very powerful. It's true, regardless of color or any kind of association, everyone is really just "hunting" each other in some form. Again, nicely done.

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Wow, this is really deep and the fact that you don't use many words makes it that much deeper. The weight you place on your words is amazing; it's tough to write short poems and have them both be really effective and really affect the reader. All of your poems that I've read are well written and each word is chosen so carefully. I'm becoming a big fan =)

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I found the form interesting and it works in a strange and simple way it is still deep .

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Of course you didn't mean to say "or white", as someone else suggested. :) The reader can add it for themselves, or not add it. It adds a mystique to the poem, obviously with intent. There are no misplaced or thrown-in words. Wonderful work.

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The format is awesome. Very cool XD Great work, it's short but that just adds to it's impact. Great work :)

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Still very cool

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Poem is amazing. In so few words you made the story simple to understand. I like the style and the very good ending. I agree with on the black and white of living.
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Ah, this was wonderful. I love it when poetry has a physical form. People don't do that very often, it's kind of refreshing. And the message, of course, is also very powerful. It's true, regardless of color or any kind of association, everyone is really just "hunting" each other in some form. Again, nicely done.

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1) I REALLY like this. Great delivery of a message in such a short piece.
2) Did you mean to say "or white"?

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