Jason-...Pregnant?!

Jason recieve's news from his girlfriend that she's pregnant. Find out how he reacts and what will happen to the baby.

I dont believe my ears. "Pregnant?!" Cara just looked down. "Cara?"
She was crying.
"Its not like I wanted it to happen, ok?" She's sobbing. "Cara, what are we gonna do?"
She breathed in a shaky breath, "I-i dont know. I guess I could get an abortion. Oh God, what am I gonna do?" She sunk to the floor. "What am I gonna do...."She just sat there for the next few minutes, trying to compose herself. "Jason, what are we gonna do?"
"I dont know..."
"well, I have to go to work. Think about it, ok?"
"ok"
She left. i had to go and lay down, or something. I was weak in the knee's and I felt like I was gonna puke. Man, the s**t I get myself into. I must have fallen asleep, or something along those lines, because I sure didnt hear the phone ring. "John!, telephone!" it was my mom. when did she get home?
I walked down the stairs. "Hey baby, its Cara" she handed me the phone. " Jason?"
"Hey Cara." I walked up the steps so no one would hear me.
"Im having The baby"

Author's Note

eck.. i dont like it

Reviews

[DarkAngelWriter]

I think first off you should break it up by dialogue, not just one paragraph. Like:

I dont believe my ears. "Pregnant?!"

Cara just looked down.

"Cara?"

She was crying. "Its not like I wanted it to happen, ok?" She's sobbing.

"Cara, what are we gonna do?"

She breathed in a shaky breath, "I-i dont know. I guess I could get an abortion. Oh God, what am I gonna do?" She sunk to the floor. "What am I gonna do...."She just sat there for the next few minutes, trying to compose herself. "Jason, what are we gonna do?"


Like that. That would make it flow a little better. I also think you could flesh it out a big. Give us more details, more conflict.

...just a thought :) I like the story line though!

[AK]

Well the storyline is good...why don't you break it up like how scotty Elizabeth said? It's confusing as one doesn't know who's saying what. Just make that clearer. Continue the story..it'll make it more interesting. I guess that's it!

[Gianna Perry]

i'm confused - his name is jason. why did his mom call for john?

[Gracee]

no offense but it really wasn't good

[Lynx]

Very short, unclear and seriously what is with the rush. Typical/cliche idea. Okay, I'm gonna go read some of ur books now, yay. xD

[Liza And Natasha]

I like it!

[lilfeather]

This is a very bad peice of writing, read some of my books instead.

[Laura E. Aranda]

you need to work on your periods and endings of sentences....

[Summers Under The Old O..]

I think it's a good story line, but the way you wrote it is a little confusing. It took me a second to figure out who was talking, Jason or Cara. I think, if you continue with this, that it will be something most teens will enjoy.

[lilfeather]

im not sure i like how i wrote this...