Linda, this one is very strong and disturbing. Excellently worded, though. Fire can be a proving ground, a purification, or just a horrible way to die. One small thing, though. Last line could be improved by adding a comma after Hey Murderers, and quotes around "Hey murderers, is it the modern sati?" Someone shouted. but otherwise, really really good. Thank you.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thanks a lot for reading and kind words, am so glad to be around all of you, take care
Linda, this one is very strong and disturbing. Excellently worded, though. Fire can be a proving ground, a purification, or just a horrible way to die. One small thing, though. Last line could be improved by adding a comma after Hey Murderers, and quotes around "Hey murderers, is it the modern sati?" Someone shouted. but otherwise, really really good. Thank you.
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Thanks a lot for reading and kind words, am so glad to be around all of you, take care
many have sacrificed themselves for the sake of others...for the betterment...it is a sad truth that these sacrifices are necessary....needs a bit of editing, but well chosen words to convey this concept.
j.
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Thanks a lot for the visit and review, I will edit little more later, take care
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