Bliss

Slit my wrist;
hope for death.
Drown myself in
  my emotions;
Lose myself in
  my Maze.
One last slit,
Upon each wrist.
Momentary or
  Eternal bliss?

Reviews

[Dawn Jones]

The cuts are generally for bliss.. the release of endorphines to take the emotional pain away. After so long though is simply hurts. I started feeling sick with myself whenever I cut. So I stopped. Still holding on to not giving in to the addiction that will always be a part of me. Good write. Short and sweet. I love it. I love you.

[Donald Meikle]

Why two? And if you want eternal a hundred years is not even a blink in eternity. Have you thought of all the accidents it took to get you here? for this so so short amount of time. Bliss? see ignorance then consider eternal ignorance. (To be ignored?) (forever?)

[Adela Muresan]

You present this bliss, as some sort of victory , as much as I can notice.

Life is the suppressing enemy you are trying to redeem yourself from, and the blood flowing from your veins is the sigh for freedom.

Although, the combination between strange and beautiful is not something I appreciate very well, I'm going to rate your poem 100/100, because you are gifted.

A.M.

[the_real_me]

not to sound mean or anything but are you emo?

[SM Davis]

I'm not going to comment on the content...only that again your imagery is very good.

[Sean]

To answer the question, momentary, either way you look at it. Cut for pleasure? it's momentary. Cut to kill? it's momentary. But after you cut your wrists...you know, really hardcore, I'm sure the time it takes for you to pass out seems like eternity. I don't cut my wrists, though. People give you a lot of s**t about it. I prefer toes, because when you have to walk with cuts all over your toes, it tends to be an extremely occasional occurrence.

But the message you're sending is very clear. Whatever emotion these lines are meant to trigger I'm sure it's worked. Simple, short and clear. Concise writing is the best writing, I've been told.