Evidence of Absence

Suicide as an obvious option
Proves life unequivocally
Probably
Though I've never tried it
I believe the evidence
In this moment
Is quite convincing
That living is the better option
Probably
As it's all I've known
I could certainly be wrong

Reviews

[Jes' Pi]

So..
We've got a sensitive topic here: suicide.
When we're talking about a thing that can cause death, we need to be careful to don't inspire the wrong message.
I think you did a good job because none of your words gave the reader a suicidal feeling. The poem inspires a melancholic, sad feeling. Also, it makes the reader ask himself/herself questions.

For short, you've done a good job! :)

[Davidgeo]

Thanks. I'm glad it appealed to you.

[Ana B.]

Loved the title dear author. Life is a strange thing, we can't prove that we exist.Are we real even? I wish cats were purple...

[Davidgeo]

It's been some time Ana B. Life is a strange thing, but it is the only thing we have, so, we'd all be f*****g morons not to ride it out regardless. This is not a new poem... I write ADD style in that I forget what in the s**t I was saying ten minutes ago. You forced me to re read my own work, I f*****g hate the sound of my own voice and now I wanna change about 75% of this. My strength does lie in editing, but, editing your own stuff has the potential to drive one insane. Do me a favor.... ignore any read request not sent this December. And write me a poem, about very pretty hair and the absurd things we do to it... without using the word the "hair" or "pretty" or "human". My cat was purplish for a couple weeks once. He has yet to forgive me for that.

[Ana B.]

I will remember that.

[Davidgeo]

Which one?

[Ana B.]

The one regarding the old requests.Although in that aspect, we're quite opposites, i rarely ever edit my works...because i know i will fall into the black hole of frustration so i can understand that. As for writing the poem, i will definitely give it a shot, although i'm VERY bad with writing on comand, usually i just write down whatever i'm in the mood and forget quick about it.

[DIVYA]

Of course, there is no certainity of what is on the other side, so I'll stick to my known devils. I like the appreciation of life in this poem.

[Davidgeo]

I'm with you on that topic.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really good, tight write.

sometimes we get into that rut...each day we look for a reason not to do it...

j.

[Davidgeo]

I'm glad you liked it.

[Davidgeo]

Silente.... stop leaving comments and then immediately blocking me so I cannot directly respond. It's pure cowardice to do s**t like that. As you can see I don't block you even though you clearly have some serious problems culminating in a very distorted "knight in shining armor" dumb a*s complex. I welcome a dialogue between us but you, just go for the bully with no brains hit and run tactic. And by the way, kid, I 'm not the one hiding... that's you "mr leave a comment and then block any direct response" d********g. Seriously kid... it's really weird and a little pathetic that you keep coming back to read and interact with someone you clearly hate. And what's with down thumbing everyone who comments on my work? They have nothing to do with whatever you think is going on. Are you seriously this childish? Ugh... stop embarrassing yourself, it's getting really pathetic and sad to witness.

[apennylate]

Perhaps if you did not troll people for a living... You would not face such a conflict of spirit... I am returning to give you that dose of attention you so crave... Maybe this time it will spark another beautiful essay on your hatred for me... Maybe you will continue to hide behind asinine and convoluted logic in order to convince yourself it is "okay" to attack others... Whatever the conclusion, we both know I bother you more than you bother me... That, my dear friend, the entirety of deep satisfaction... That allows me to ALWAYS win. Both in spirit and mind, enjoy your day...! (Hint, you are wrong)

[JohnD4]

The art of living and suicide are fodder for most writers and poets at sometime or other, and sad to say many of my friends have chosen the latter.I enjoyed the read.
John

[Davidgeo]

I'm going to kill myself when the time comes. Not in an idiot emo or nihilistic way... but if I haven't completely lost my marbles, I will end it before it gets too painful (or costly). Obviously I'm not religious.

[Birdwild]

Working in the field I work in, from personal experiences with family members, I truly believe and know living is the better option. The everlasting affects on the people left behind is immeasurable.

[Davidgeo]

True belief and knowing don't use the same standards of definition. I truly believe that no one alive truly knows one way or the other.

[Birdwild]

Your poem, your thoughts.

[Mirror]

A statement of fact in a poetic form indeed.

After all, "Probably" makes the real sense of the fact in the poem to stand corrected.

"I believe the evidence
In this moment
To be quite convincing
That living is the better option"

I think it would have been;

"I believe the evidence
In this moment
Is quite convincing
That living is the better option"

[Davidgeo]

Yeah, I think I like your suggestion. "Is quite convincing" is better. Thanks for that.