Carefully

very carefully (sometimes not so carefully)

the misery inside

it dissolves over time

tomorrow, yesterday

right now will dictate

the misery inside

how it dissolves over time

today, right now

what is not yesterday

but will become our tomorrow

always and eventually

this thing buried deeply 

it does dissolve openly

over time

we all  do evolve

into something 

we all will evolve

it is the choice

not all will survive

to go on

some will succumb 

/s

Author's Note

Reviews

[Gregoria Somol Ahmed]

The repetition of "the misery inside... it dissolves over time" adds a meditative rhythm, pulling the reader into a contemplative space. I find the juxtaposition of inevitability ("we all will evolve") with the element of choice ("not all will survive") especially thought-provoking, as it invites us to reflect on our own paths and decisions.

Your words feel deeply honest and relatable, capturing the delicate balance between struggle and hope. The metaphorical yet grounded approach you’ve taken allows readers to resonate with the journey of evolving despite life's challenges. Thank you for sharing such an introspective and profound piece. Keep writing—your work truly resonates!

[Davidgeo]

You are too generous with me. I believe you know better.

[Gregoria Somol Ahmed]

While I appreciate your humility, I want to assure you that my praise was sincere and heartfelt. Your poem resonated deeply with me because of its raw honesty and the profound way it explores the themes of evolution, choice, and resilience. These are truths that many readers, including myself, can connect with on a personal level.
I hope you continue to trust in your voice and the unique perspective you bring to your writing—it truly matters.

Please keep sharing your work. It’s a privilege to witness your creative journey!

[Davidgeo]

It's not humility, you already know what I have to say

[Gregoria Somol Ahmed]

I’ll leave it at that and simply say: your poem resonates deeply, and I hope you continue to share your gift with others.😊🥂

[Davidgeo]

Thank you for the encouragement. It gives me strength. I appreciate that very much.

[Gregoria Somol Ahmed]

I am glad it did. You are always welcome my friend 🥂

[Beren]

You gave me hope, dude. Stop. You write perfect, can’t help to get mad.
Loved this one, again.

[Davidgeo]

Smoke it like dope. the hope i mean. Get addicted to it.

Thank you for your friendly reviews. I appreciate it.

[Inkspire]

Amazing poem
The poem 'carefully ' captures the truth of living !
"today, right now
what is not yesterday
but will become our tomorrow"

[ashley]

i love your writing so much, always intentional & i can tell you have a specific thing you want to convey, whether it be a feeling, an experience, or just a thought, you depict it very nicely. a bit metaphorical, sometimes simple, always effective; it all blends together very nicely! never stop writing, david!

[Davidgeo]

I wouldn't stop if they paid me. Good therapy is too expensive.