Edited Virgin

Edited Virgin

A Poem by Lauren Burch
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Sometimes, you just can't wait. Dedicated to Bethany Hodge.

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Love was never a virtue
But it didn't matter
Never mattered to
The virgin in love
In love with a fake
In love with no one
And No One was going to
Take all she had
Seventeen never a pure age
Senior year of high school
Never a pure year
Why change a statistic?
When you think you know what
Love is..?
Purity lost to a tainted angel
Fallen from open wings
Every last ounce of innocence
Poured into the roaring ocean
But its okay
Love was never a virtue
Especially when love was his
To abuse
Only to end the roller coaster
After stealing her will
Without her knowing
To end what she thought
Was real
Not even to her own face
Why admit you lost something
When its still out there somewhere?
She finds it again
Pieces were missing
But nonetheless still whole
Chained it to her wrist
Tattooed it to her neck
Taped her paper wings to her back
The one name scribed onto
The list of corruptions
A quick dash of whiteout
She is the
Edited virgin

© 2008 Lauren Burch


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I suppose I should reiterate Carol's WOW review. That just about sums it up. I'm wordy though. :)
I like the premise behind this piece, and the care with which you dealt with a topic that is sometimes difficult to make clear in so few words, the loss of innocence, the desire for love. It's plain and beautiful. I'm glad you entered it in my contest. Definitely a finalist.

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

This caught my interest from the first line and held
it throughout this amazing write. Thank you for
submitting this to my contest. ~ Helena

Posted 15 Years Ago


Nice complicated peice over all. Makes you think about the possiblities and probabilities of various things. Nice work Indeed.

I would also say "wow" for it!

~KA~

Posted 16 Years Ago


I suppose I should reiterate Carol's WOW review. That just about sums it up. I'm wordy though. :)
I like the premise behind this piece, and the care with which you dealt with a topic that is sometimes difficult to make clear in so few words, the loss of innocence, the desire for love. It's plain and beautiful. I'm glad you entered it in my contest. Definitely a finalist.

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

i have one word "wow"

Posted 16 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was very powerful...it screams out tones of regret, and yet acceptence-and hope rings through. Very good job.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really enjoyed this read. An experience far too many of us may have encountered in our lives in an ugly way, yet summed up with beautifully written words.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Pieces were missing
But nonetheless still whole
Chained it to her wrist
Tattooed it to her neck
Taped her paper wings to her back
The one name scribed onto
The list of corruptions
A quick dash of whiteout"

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

All passions flow together creatively, whether they are our emotions or they are the things we must do to define ourselves.....well-written, and introspective, I enjoyed it....

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ooweeeee!!...i love this..amazing...
love these lines:
"Pieces were missing
But nonetheless still whole
Chained it to her wrist
Tattooed it to her neck
Taped her paper wings to her back
The one name scribed onto
The list of corruptions..."
"A quick dash of whiteout"---very nice..
She is the.."----gives her so much power
"..Edited virgin"-------love when a poet/writer closes with the title piece named..mmmmm, love it

"Why change a statistic?"---10.0!


Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Simply sublime. Such a beautiful poem. I especially loved these lines:

Purity lost to a tainted angel
Fallen from open wings
Every last ounce of innocence
Poured into the roaring ocean

And I really liked the way you ended it. Great piece!



Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Lauren Burch
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