Can You Hear Me

Can You Hear Me

A Poem by lonesome_loser

Can you hear me?
Begging for true love
Can you hear me?
Searching for answers from above

Can you hear me?
The nights I cry out for you
Can you hear me?
Or see the tears in my eyes of blue

Can you hear me?
I've been calling out your name
Can you hear me?
Your response is always the same

Can you hear me?
When I speak to you at night
Can you hear me?
I wish someday that you might

Can you hear me?
My heart is screaming so loud
Can you hear me?
Because you're nowhere to be found

Can you hear me?
Why do you not answer
Can you hear me?
My life is such a disaster

Can you hear me?
Am I not good enough for you
Can you hear me?
I'm still begging for you

Can you hear me?
I just want your love
Can you hear me?
My dear lord above

Can you hear me?
When I cry alone in the dark
Can you hear me?
When I ask you to heal my heart

© 2013 lonesome_loser


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Wow this is very beautiful and very moving.

Posted 10 Years Ago


A very emotional and sorrowful write. Love is often the biggest pain one has to endure

Posted 10 Years Ago


A great poem. A crisis of faith captured in words, I did enjoy the read. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


really don't think u need the color changes in yer stanzas

Posted 10 Years Ago


i love this! I can picture you standing by the window and screaming "can you hear me?" amazing poem

Posted 10 Years Ago


Amazing write.. with amazing questions and the repetition of 'Can u hear me' ...


Posted 10 Years Ago


I like the repetitiveness, as it gives the reader a sense of time passing, and many a prayer spoken with a fading faith. There are a couple of weak rhymes but, understandable in the scheme of the emotion and voice in the poem so, it doesn't effect the strength as much as some breaks in rhythm might. Nice one.

Posted 10 Years Ago


You wrote this piece very well. I can tell you put your heart into it. The flow of the poem was perfect, very nicely written.

Posted 10 Years Ago


there's not enough saki
for me to answer this

Posted 10 Years Ago


Searching for an answer in rhythm and rhyme. Well said!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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