Tired

"smile" he said, touching her cheek

she turned away, cheeks burnished red.

he would leave her soon

too damn self indulged to care she was 

falling 

into an abyss.

"i don't care." she said, 

shrugging, as he watched the waitress

walk

despair appeared, and offered her

a gentle smile. an empty smile.

she agreed to 

everything 

it entailed.

Reviews

[sivan]

"i don't care." she said,
shrugging, as he watched the waitress
walk
despair appeared, and offered her
a gentle smile. an empty smile.
she agreed to
everything
it entailed.

these lines are great. despair appeared and offered her a gentle smile. again your writing is captivating and so filled with honest emotion and treacherous metaphors. love this piece

[love, lorey]

Thank you for such a lovely review!

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem made me desire to know more. You lightly touched on subjects create vision and question. The good description made the situation come alive. I enjoy this type of poetry. Allow the reader to use their imagination. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[love, lorey]

Thanks so much!!

[Rita L. Sev]

When we agree to take despair as a roommate, the rent will be paid in tears... You paint a brief yet telling scene here. Well done.

[love, lorey]

What a lovely and insightful review! Thank you so much for reading :)