Thoughts

muddled thoughts when love hurts.

Heart aching, eyes flowing, hurt so badly, not knowing.

Thoughts like furry rabbits scurrying around

in the warren of my brain, causing pain.

Thoughts overlapping, what is happening?

 

Time is drifting, I am shifting, and sifting

through all the things we left unsaid.....

We haven't talked, you haven't said.....

Are we still good, or is our love dead?

 

Scorched heart hiding, needs debriding.

Thoughts are driving me insane!

Like furry rabbits scurrying, hurrying

in the warren of my brain, causing pain.

 

Reviews

[fiery-san]

I could feel the pain radiating from this poem... it screamed frustration and asking the question WHY? and keep saying NO! it's tells me of something your unwilling to let go because you love it so much but it still hurts to keep it beside you...

Good work! ^_^

[mandy]

thanks....you are perceptive!

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot of deep thoughts in the poem.
"Are we still good, or is our love dead?'
The questions of love. Leave us wishing for better places. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jack Strickland]

Love your poems Mandy, you are great at many things and this is just one of them. Keep up the great words sweetie!!

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...I like the ending the most...:)

[Frieda P]

Sounds painful 'thoughts like furry rabbits scurrying around in the warren of my brain'....I love that line.

[Ose Mountain]

It is not always what is said but the un said that boggles the brain.
You well made the that clear.
The brain matter has no feelings but the mind does. This I know for certian due to the bullet in my right brain.

[MOON]

Running around the thoughts in your head. Lovely descriptive write.

[An owl on the moon]

Yes.. oh what perfect description of such painful things.. thoughts as rabbits running wild... Your metaphor works the most depthful imagery.

[zainul]

A wonderful piece.
Vividly painted the thought process when subjected to confusion.
I hope the episode of hurting by love is over now and everything is
running properly in the warren of your brain.

[mandy]

it is somewhat better, thx

[zainul]

I feel very good to know that you are somewhat better now.

[Enid Blake]

The way you've written this reflects that kind of anxious, agitated brain - sifting like you described in the 2nd verse. I liked the idea of the brain like a warren again emphasises many different paths of thought. Good rhyme too :)

[mandy]

thank u enid.