Butterfly

My love is everywhere.

I am beautiful in everyone’s eyes

My colors and tender wings flap in a magical paradise

Every flower in the field, lilies in the river calling my name

Desires of connecting my spirit in the nectar of dream

I have touched every flower, leaving great memories

Each moment has passed reaching the desired happiness

I fly each day to find the real me, wishing things will change to the uncommon

Wishing to stop in a place where my soul will find the reason

I am tired flying here and there, but I kept pushing my inevitable bend

Someday my wings will stop and my life will end

I want to remember one thing, those flowers are worth remembering

precious gems that embedded in my soul forever, the moment I am dying

I close my eyes, I am a butterfly.

 

Reviews

[Author Unknown]

This is incredible Marc. I like the symbiotic relationship you portrayed between your muse and the flowers.
If you're open for suggestion and improvement. Your last ending line is very critical.From your readers point of view there's no need to repeat or reemphasize the subject.
" The moment I'm dying, I close my eyes , as I whisper their names. ?."

The train of thoughts up to the last word line and period continues. Your butterfly still remember each and every flower he visited even until he took his last breath... Its sounds and ends better from your audience point of view.

[B-poet]

I loved the overall theme you've written here. A poignant, emphatic, powerful and insightful write. Keep up the great work. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Bpoet :) love you words.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A beautiful image that snakes in around the mind and plunges deep, welll done. good read.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Thomas :) appreciate your words.

[Sami Khalil]

"I have touched every flower, leaving great memories

Each moment has passed reaching the desired happiness

I fly each day to find the real me, wishing things will change to the uncommon"

What a nice and lovely poem poet...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Bro. :) thanks for the words and dropping by.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[gabrielle]

"I fly each day to find the real me, wishing things will change to the uncommon
Wishing to stop in a place where my soul will find the reason"

Until we find fulfillment and/or contentment, we will always be a drifter like a butterfly. nicely penned marc!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yeah I agree Gab :) thanks for the words appreciate it.

[BlueDreams]

Such a beautiful poem ..
I really enjoyed :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Swapz747 appreciate your words.

[Rita L. Sev]

those flowers is worth to remember, precious gems that embedded in my soul forever...

Marc, this is so beautiful - a reminder that life is fleeting, and so full of wonder.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ms. Rita :) glad you here.

[Pete Langley]

You are a butterfly, Marc....you have beauty in your core and love aplenty in your words. May you always fly. P.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir Pete I missed u :) hhehe thanks for the words.

[Mark]

'I want to remember one thing, those flowers is worth to remember" This is a great line... it's grammatically incorrect, but still a great line! 'those flowers are worth remembering' would be better I think.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mark I change it considering your suggestion. Thanks a lot.

[Coyote Poetry]

Would be good to be a butterfly. Description led the reader to good places and thoughts.
"I fly each day to find the real me, wishing things will change to the uncommon
Wishing to stop in a place where my soul will find the reason"
Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Brother :) love your words always.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Such a beautiful butterfly you are, Marc. In just few months of being here, you've been such a good friend to me. Thank you for that.

This is a wonderful comeback poem. Nice rhyme. Keep writing. Do what makes you happy. Just follow your heart...and be not afraid to fly if you have to.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Dhaye :) hheheh thanks being my friend too.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Akala mo, dito lang yan? Aabangan ko ang pag-uwi mo. Hihiramin ko lahat ng coat and ties mo. Lagot ka. Hehe.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol heheh para sa binyagan, lol di na nag online is Sir Joe? :) bago ngayun pic ni pax ah astig.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Nag-oonline minsan. Hayan sa ilalim, siya ang first reviewer nito at pinuri naman nya tong piece na to.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Aha :) lol good, sigue work mode muna ako babalik ako mamaya. ingatz ka Dhaye.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Hayan, nalito na ako sa bilis ng reply natin. Doon pala sa piece ko na "Did I" siya nag-review. Hehe.