WE CAN

CANT

WE CAN NOT

WE CAN NOT DIE, IF WERE ALREADY DEAD

WE CAN SINK, IF WE ALREADY SUNK

WE CAN NOT BLEED IF WE ALREADY BLEAD!

Author's Note

DONT TELL ME I PUT IT IN CAPS I KNOW I DID!

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Caps emphasize each line, no problem about that.
Nice use of symbol here....of emptiness...numbness...gloom...
Hope one day you'll write the positive of this.
Keep on going.

[Wpww!!!]

Thanks for the comment but this is a positive. I wrote it because its about strength, and a lot more. there was no negitive!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Ah, I thought you're dealing with emptiness, numbness or gloom because you keep on emphasizing death, bleeding, and sinking, so I said it's negative. Okay, I see now...you are using IRONY in here...describing the opposite of what a thing is. Good choice of literary device. Don't get offended, for I mean nothing to offend you. Actually, I like it as I thought it's negative feelings...then turn on positive ones...just like me, From Dark to Light.
Thanks :)

[Wpww!!!]

Your right though all my poems i based on my passed waht could happen or write now so i try to write all positive like i said this is about strength reflected off something bad i wrote thise because well i dont wont to talk about it. i wrote it because i was hurt not phyically or by words by my mother leaving me. now i dont get to see her so im learning to move on now.
that took no offence of what you said.

[Wpww!!!]

What i said probly didnt make any szince but i want to make it short.

[Wpww!!!]

so i guess there was some negitive im never shure about my poems i write what i feel as well i listen to music of what i feel.