Guess What?!

umm. yeah.

guess what

life isn't always easy

and guess what else!
there is absolutely nothing, you can do about it

until you accept that,

you will never have the joy,

that god meant for you to have

and guess what,

life has pressures

and guess what else!
those pressures, are the very elements

that turn me into the diamond 

that i will one day be

Author's Note

i kinda wrote this at the last minute. Well, this actually took all of 47 seconds to write. Yes i timed myself. =] It actually started out as a story. ha. Review if u wanna

Reviews

[Hannah Monttkomepy]

First off, I love that you posted on your own poem haha, makes me laugh =D You should've elaborated though. Your review gets an F! jk

I don't really like the "and guess what else!" part, but everything I read by u in school or in POP or whatever, you have that serious yet kid tone to your stuff when I'm usually more serious so it's understandable that I wouldn't like it. I'm not sure if I just dissed myself or you or what, but no diss was meant! Sorry, I'm tired. I do like how you repeat that though, I like it when poems keep bringing up things in repetition.

I think you should chance "god" to God because there's something about that not being the right way to state His name...

But I like it, and if you'd spent more time.... well, I probably should be shocked that you almost spent a minute on something than your usual look at the paper and not read it =D, but still! If you would've spent more time on it, I might've been speechless (you know how difficult that's to do!)! So great write!

Hannah

[Kara]

i love it!!! "until you accept that,
you will never have the joy,
that god meant for you to have"

[matti3]

i dont like it. . .