creeps

felt

As the bizarre is reduced
As the creeps in cities stew
Amidst these perpetual moments
I see me, a thin man in blue
Strange to be seen living
Heaving, Bleeding open grins
Blue rivers of blood running within
On desolate corners of sin
A demon claims a friend
Gnawing on crawling cells
Disease decaying me
Slightly tasting finality
Tight rewinding tongues
Sucking lungs of gentle crimson
Suspended among the rotting slums
I know solitude will cease to be
Watching me arriving at dwelling D14
Gently swaying on string death is comforting
Watching my life unwinding beginning to ending
It is punishing and lumbering

Reviews

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... very trippy ... loved these expressions ... "As the bizarre is reduced" ... "perpetual moments" ... then these lines ...

Strange to be seen living
Heaving, Bleeding open grins
Blue rivers of blood running within
On desolate corners of sin

... exquisite poetry ... you have a way with words ... and then these lines ...

Tight rewinding tongues
Sucking lungs of gentle crimson

... very graphic and brutal but extremely poetic ...

Gently swaying on string death is comforting
Watching my life unwinding beginning to ending
It is punishing and lumbering

... a biting end ... excruciating ... poignant ... you write beautifully ... (highest rating) ...

[elephant]

I was on alot of uppers when i worte this.Im okay now but I do appreciate you reading my worksI Thank you!

[Tony]

I feel like this sometimes too.
In particular, the line:
'Watching my life unwinding beginning to ending.
It is punishing and lumbering..
Escape, my new friend!
Before they render you unable to reason the difference between free and slave.