Pit of Hope

As you know I live in an island. It's believe to be occupied by terrorists. Well surprise! That's so NOT true. I wrote this poem when I heard another misconception about us.

Birds chirp singing,

Wind freshens everything,

Sky so high and bright,

With fluffy clouds in sight.

Waves clash with bubbles,

Erasing every footprint I make,

Cold breeze, drizzling, luring.

Vast ocean, inviting, inciting.

To some home of terrorists,

To others den of guerillas.

Neither.

A fallacy, a dagger.

Listen to voices in the cave,

Look beyond darkness.

Pit of hope, it seems

where dreamers

of tomorrow dwell.

Author's Note

Photo Credit: Google Images.
The photo is the island where I live, where dreamers like me are stranded.
Let me know what you think about the poem. Thanks in advance :-D

Reviews

[Daydreamer]

Great work though the main conception was somehow obscure to my understanding! Is it that you're speaking out the thoughts of the people who have adverse conceptions of your island? Could you elaborate please?💕

[Mirra]

This poem is base from my own opinion, I've assume that the people from our island thinks the same way as I do, and if they were the one who heard such misconception they would have said the same thing ^_^ Thank you for this review!

[Pax]

sounds like it is a part of mindanao, even here in Saudi if I say where I am from and heard the name Mindanao, they will say abusayaf, then i just laugh it out,another rumors gone wrong, well it does happen... anyways, you have done a great job in everything else here... keep writing kabayan!

[Mirra]

Yeah it's way to the south of Mindanao po ^_^ Nearest to Sabah Malaysia. Thank you :-)

[Pax]

now i am curious kabayan, malayo ka ba talaga sa city proper?

[Mirra]

I think so. I mean we only watch other things in the television but we don't experience the real thing although our island is slowly progressing ^_^

[Pax]

I've read in your profile it is a distant island, ano salita ninyo diyan? ano pangalan nang lugar ninyo dyan? I think your island is progressing, kasi may internet kayo diba..?

[Mirra]

Yep. Sama and Tausug gamit naming linggwahe although meron ding mga bisaya dito. And we use Taglog and English pag sa school. Taga Tawi-Tawi po ako ^_^

[Pax]

wow, Tawi-Tawi, nice........ its nice to have you here in wc kabayan, mukhang malapit na kayo sa Malaysia... nice, so nakaka intindi karin ng bisaya, kasi bisaya ako, we are from the same big part of the philipines- the big island of mindanao... :)

[Mirra]

Nakakaintindi lang po ako ng bisaya pero hindi ako ganun ka husay magbisaya. Buti naman po alam niyo kung san ang Tawi-Tawi karamihan kasi hindi alam kung saan island namin or does it even exist hehe. San po kayo sa Mindanao?

[Pax]

I am from Cagayan de Oro, Misamis Oriental, hehe, completo talaga...but now I am here in Saudi, working my a*s out, para lang maka ipon and makatulong narin sa magulang... Yeah, I know Tawi-Tawi, Kala ko before, konti lng ang nakatira diyan but now as I search it that group of islands are slowly and surely progressing na...

[Mirra]

Wow that's great. Masisipag talaga ang mga pinoy ^_^ I've been to CDO too, I studied before at MSU Iligan but transferred back to our little island. Glad to meet someone from Mindanao ^_^

[Mary Campagna]

Wowwwwww…This IS BEAUTIFUL!

[Mirra]

Thank you :-D

[Free_Soul]

Refreshing poem... superb...loved it :)

[Mirra]

Thank you :-D

[Matt Thomas]

Well first off, I must say it is great to be back on writers café to be doing the thing I love and that is reading great writes like this one...The first few lines are absolutely the soul and beauty and you bring it out like a bright rainbow of blinding light!! Now with the 2nd stanza you REALLY define the delicate nature of your homeland...The darkside which you descricbe in a haunting yet delicate way..I am very blunt and clear when it comes to whether I think a writer is good or not and you my friend are terrific and your descriptive and masking words really blast off the page...Absolutely amazing!!! I just started reviewing again and I average giving out 70-80s for effort..This though I give a 98!!!

[Mirra]

Wow! Thank you so much :-D

[Jen Yarrington]

Wow, such a contrast between your experience of the beauty of your island and what others think of the island.

I would change just a few things: "With fluffy clouds at sight," I would change to "With fluffy clouds in sight"

Also, "dent of guerillas," perhaps you meant "den", meaning a cave, lair or hideout.

You should post a picture of your island - I love the Philippines!

[Mirra]

Yeah that's what I meant. I did put a picture there, I don't know why it does not appear. Thank you for the review :-D

[Konigin]

Absolutely Awesome! I like the imagery you used. I could envision your island! I wish i could come and visit you to see it with my own eyes. :)

[Mirra]

Thank you a zillion Chelsea :-D Yeah do come, it's beautiful here.

[Konigin]

Any time dear! And i WILL come... when ever i get rich... :P