CROW

A poem about crows, my spirit clan

CROW

High aloft,

Deep in leaf,

Talons locked,

Lest he sleep,

Crow is perched,

He guards their keep.

Unseen, all seeing,

His eyes must know,

Who is friend, what is foe.

Those dawns I cross

The cold bare floor to 

Barefoot step

 Through kitchen door,

Rising to the skies I hear

My secret raucous name ring clear 

As Crow cries out

For Clan to hear,

Friend is here,

Our friend is here.

Then such Love and joy I feel,

And peace of heart

The Night to heal.

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

This is written quite well. Almost reminds me of Poe. I love the theme of the crow and the last to lines say a lot. During sleep all creatures heal and drift away on dreams.

[Michael Sun Bear]

Hello and thank you. Wow! A comparison to Poe. Yes it seems all creatures do sleep and heal, well mammals at least, and some have fascinating safety features. Crows, and other birds I imagine, have feet that automatically lock onto a limb. Porpoises sleep alternating one half of their brain at a time so as to avoid drowning.

[Poetic Beauty]

Animals are amazing in general

[Lisasview]

Reading a second one of yours.
I enjoyed the whole idea of it.
You and the crow…kindred spirits.
Interesting because I seldom read any poems about crows… I did write Innocence and I do use crow as a metaphor.
I hope you do not mind me asking why you put a comma after every sentence at the beginning of your poem? And the commas and no punctuation and some periods near the end.
I too am “old school” as you said, with my writing.
All in all I understood the meaning and really enjoyed the read….
Lisasview still in Spain

[Michael Sun Bear]

Thanks for reading and thanks for the review. Writing poetry is a relatively new endeavor for me. I tend to think and write in sentences. I guess I punctuate as if I were story writing. Perhaps I should abandon the punctuation?

[Lisasview]

I often find myself writing as if my poem was a story. I have to think differently and make sure my words are a poem. I believe correct punctuation is very important in poetry. It is sort of like breathing.
If you like I could help you abit with Crow… you can message me.
Lisa

[Desert Knave]

Pretty and spiritual. Very nicely done. ~Jim

[Michael Sun Bear]

Thank you, much appreciated.

[Kelly Scheppers]

The syntax of your words slay me, again and again and again. So thrilled to meet you!

[Michael Sun Bear]

Thank you Kelly, I’m glad you stopped by. The feeling is mutual.

[Davidgeo]

Your sense of word economy is delightful. I wish I could do that.

Edgar would be proud.

[Michael Sun Bear]

Thank you for the kind words. When I finish a poem or a story, read it through, I almost always find lines or sentences that are too wordy. I work at simplifying. I find it a rewarding process. MSB

[Davidgeo]

Reminds me of trimming facial hair. Hard editing.