affects us all

Is this one for our people

Is this one for our lord

Do we always have to pick the fight

Just because we think we are right

Or can we sit down and talk it out

That way the bloodshed we stay without

Some people get so self-indulged

That they think they can live without

Then they loose there loved ones

and relize what its all about

it doesn't matter what we find right or wrong

its what we do that affects us all

Reviews

[Avinash]

The central idea of the poem carries the eternal truth. When we fight we only loose.

[Michaił Łaszn..]

Nice writing! I like the last line especially well because it says it all. "It's what we do that affects us all". I lost a loved one and still don't realise what it is all about, but somehow find a tiny bit of strength within and am moving on, somehow, regardless. Thank you for sharing your writing. Great job on this!

[Lucien Maier]

nicely stated. Your writing here has a purpose and a message.
Only when you include that in your work can you make a change in people.
The first piece was a "wallow with me" piece. This is a stand out piece pointing to a better way. With ideas on how to get there. well done.

[Sami Khalil]

This reminds me of the saying : We are all in the same boat. You raise some good profound questions and a good debate too...:)

[Silhouette]

Some people get so self-indulged
That they think they can live without
Then they loose THEIR loved ones
and REALISE what it's all about

thise lines really stood out to me, well done. lol and the bolded words are spelling mistakes :P