Anger flames

short ,but sweet:)

burning like a fire bright

gives me fever through the night

a flaming blaze that grows and grows

when it will stop i do not know

fury,anger in my mind

to calm down i have no time

blinded by the raging blaze

can't see straight my eyes are glazed

sparking, spitting, hissing too

taking over control of you

senses are forigen

control is vain

brurning hard like a pain

the only savior to this plight

Is one to true friend to help me fight

Author's Note

Just something i came up with!
hope you all like it:)

Reviews

[Jeremia]

I liked the flow. Nice job.

[Megara]

thx:)

[Emily Feret]

Someone needs anger management! lol JK Really great, strong piece!

[Megara]

writing is my anger management:) thx:)

[beautiful dreamer]

i love it!

[Megara]

Thx:)

[beautiful dreamer]

welcome :)

[Dark Rider]

I love this! The way you described the emotion was amazing! You are really good. I can't wait to read what else you have written. :)

[Megara]

thank you and feel free to browse my writing though i don't have as much as some:)

[Dark Rider]

You have plenty, although, I wish you had more. ;)

[Megara]

i'll work on that;)

[Dark Rider]

Good. (o^－^o)

[Distant horizons]

Ah, we all need that friend. Has a great feel to this and wonderful flow. Can almost imagine vincent price reading this (old horror actor) Except, he would put a sinister laugh at the end.

[Megara]

thank you:)

[Distant horizons]

ou're welcome :-)

[Megara]

:D

[icelandicblue]

I love that the words are red and bold. The rhyme is great and the sentiment is strong.

[Megara]

thank you!
i appreciate your review:)

[quinfinn]

this is truly great! i love how you convey the anger with your words and the rhyme scheme is perfect and the meter flows nicely throughout. i don't linger on minor issues but i will help you correct a couple of minor issues if you don't mind...foreign is the correct spelling and you might think about wording the phrase "taking control over you" to make better sense with syntax...i love this piece, it sings!

[Megara]

Thank you:)
(yay!my first read request review-thanks quin:)

[quinfinn]

any time, Megara...happy to help

[Megara]

:)

[Wolfwind]

I felt words captured the title of the piece very nicely. The color enhances the feelings and gives a warm glow to the imagery you've woven. The only thing that I might suggest is line 4... you've got "it will it will" ?? It makes me wonder if that was a typo or on purpose?

Other than that. It's nicely put together.

Aaron

[Megara]

thank you for pointing that out to me:) that is a typo that i will fix right now thank you!

[danceswithhorses]

Ooh, love the red font, it adds to what you're trying to say. This is a nice poem, a few typos but nothing major. :)

[Megara]

thank you! i thought that it might emphasize my point:)

[Holly Mason]

dang good rant-control is vain great line
I could feel the energy behind this you let it out with word rage
like the flow of this it just adds to your content
interesting title choice like it much
thank you for sharing

[Megara]

THANK YOU!!!