Sorrow

~the change of the wind has an effect on me~ 

My tears change direction...

Instead of rolling down, they go sideways

~My sorrow~

My sweet sweet sorrow.

I sit in self putty because I don't know what to do

Thoughts of sad thing cross my mind

~I feel no emotion~ 

I can't help it!

So don't get mad

Don't say that I've never loved you

Cause I have, I do, and always will!

~It's just that my emotions~

Have disappeared 

Some where in my mind,

I try to feel

I fake happy

But I cry

~And I'm sorry~

So sorry

Very sorry

~But I feel, beraly anything~ 

Forgive me...

Reviews

[eglantine]

i'd delete the third line of the first stanza because the first two lines already let the reader know the tears are being forced to flow sidways, rather than down. It's always awesome when lines can do that without actually telling, just like the first lines do. They show.

[Rose]

Very good again. :)
Although, I have one small mistake that I would like to point out, hope you don't mind.
"~But I feel, beraly anything~" it should be "~But I feel, barely anything~"
But except that one small mistake, that I don't think anyone else has actually noticed, but I just thought maybe you would like to know about it, it was very great read.
Would love to read more :)
100/100

[axel]

i will never understand the principles of love,good poem80