Melted

A drabble on summer love and being young and all those other trite, Kodak moments.

The air is ripe, and we bite into it

The sun is warm butter, and we bathe in it

The sidewalk is naked, and so we adorn it

with rainbows, with SKY BLUE, with neapolitan puddles. 

Our hair is wild, and the wind isn't helping

Our hands brush once, and my heart takes off running

Our backs are sweating, and the radio's playing

Bruce Springsteen, Tom Petty, Neil Young.

The waves are salty, and you look like heaven

The sand is scorching, and your smile makes me thirsty

The sky is cloudless, and you just get tanner

while my shoulders turn pink like my cheeks when you kiss them.

I drink too much at your best friend's birthday

I tell you a secret of mine without thinking

I worry for five seconds, stomach starts knotting

but you pull me close and give me your tequila-lime-salty lips.

The exit signs fly by, and your hand's on the gearshift

The night feels alive with a beat, and I need it

The car is our ticket, our suitcase, we've packed it

and we drive all night with our fingers laced up.

We're sunburnt and tired, the bed's an oasis

We're sore and there's sand in a number of places

The TV is on but we watch each other's faces

and you tell me my eyes are mermaid sea-green. 

It's citrus and berry and lemonade-flavored

It's Coppertone and aloe and cheeseburger-scented

It's red, white, and blue and it's firework-colored

and when you talk I can hear the ocean like a shell at my ear. 

And it will come again next year with magic and snapshots

and sunblock for me and a dreamsicle for you. 

Reviews

[SteveB]

You did such a magnificent job of carrying me both to your place and to NY summers 30 years ago. I loved the structure here. It gave the piece, particularly the fifth stanza, a speed to match the mood. The earlier stanzas had a slower pace given the word choices but then as night approached it sped up. Very well done.

[Luke L]

Lovely, beautiful piece :) I look forward to reading more of your gorgeous writing :)

[Rob Santana]

Wow!!! This is a very nice piece. It's funny you mention Tom Petty, I can actually hear him singing this piece as lyrics, haha. Nicely done.

[Rhiannon]

thank you so much ^_^ I'm a huge Tom Petty & the Heartbreakers fan haha

[zainul]

There are so many things around the lovers.
But the most beautiful things to them are their faces.
You gathered all the contradictions that make harmony.
Love your beauteous write.