Heart of ice,

Heart of ice,

Her heart is strange

It's as cold as ice

And always out of range

It must have a hefty price

For it is locked away

Never to touch or see

It will never see the light of day

I bet her heart wishes to be free

But that is a mistake she will not make again

For it was of a foolish man whom was done

That she can never bare the pain

Because he chose to run

But my darling I promise there is more to believe in

So crack that ice in you heart and soul

They are not all deceiving

Please let me make you hole 

My love... 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to crack open woman with locked doors and heart. Can be done with kindness and time. I like the complete poem. The good flow of thoughts led to a very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[micky]

Thank you for the wonderful review I really appreciate it ;p

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[BennyBooth]

Makes me sad :(( But i loved it! Nice work! you evoke emotion so well..... :))

[micky]

Thanks so much for the review

[BennyBooth]

you're welcome :)

[Tai Ryens]

The yearnings of your speaker for their lover to melt her heart are apparent in this piece, and you've conveyed this feeling well. I especially like the way this poem sounds like the desperate pleas of a lover begging the other to thaw out her heart from the ice that grew along to the memory of the mistake she had made in the past, the mistake that caused her to avoid love altogether in fear of getting hurt. Well done indeed, micky.

[micky]

Thank you Tai for your amazing review!!! I really appreciate it :)

[A. Pike]

Besides the small hiccup in the last line forgetting the 'w' in whole, it's a great piece of writing. You easily could have spent stanzas describing this poem but it was short and sweet. My only suggestion would be to possibly add a touch more to end. The majority is spent describing the pain she's felt and how it's hardened her against love so it seems at the end a little more passion or fire is needed to show how desperate you are to change her mind about the world. Just a thought though, great job!

[micky]

Thank you for the honest criticism, I think you are right about the end. I appreciate the review

[Rene Salinas]

Lovely sentiment this is. The sharing that her heart has become disheartened by a series of actions and how the partner rather than to confront and change through reason prefers to embrace and heal with the hope to restore some purity.

Lovely

Thankyou

[micky]

Thank you for your wonderful review sometimes in life it is better to take the helpful and patient approach

[AprilRN1210]

This is a subject that is dear to me for several reasons and can relate to the other side of this poem.. you have done a pretty good job with this one.. I really enjoyed it... one suggestion.... did you mean "whole" in the last stanza or is it a play on words???

[micky]

Thank you so much April. I think I meant to say whole but I always mix the homophones up like witch and which I am trying to work on that. This poem means allot to me, I'm so glad you liked it

[Lauriegirl]

this flows like a dream......great piece

[micky]

I wrote this for my favorite song