My tommorow

My tomorrow 

I'm guessing you shocked 

By the dumb look on your face

Don't try to come back, because the door will be locked

You remember that time you called me a disgrace

Well look at me now

I'm over you and your friends

Just like you I forgot about my promises and that oh so important vow

But my dear friend this is where it ends

Today I will be the laugh of the town for a while

But tomorrow you will be on your own while I did something with my life

For all the tears you caused I will smile

For you will live with strife

 

To think we were friends so long ago 

Reviews

[Malister Mikey]

I really enjoyed this, I have been in this very same situation before so it is very relatable for me it was well written good job.

[micky]

Thank you so much Mikey:p

[AprilRN1210]

ok... first with the "errors" that I "think" I spot...

"I'm guessing you shocked"... here think you meant... "you're" as in you are shocked...

"You remember that time you called me a disgrace(?)"... this is a question, so need a ? at the end...

"Well look at me now(!)"... here I would put an exclamation mark at the end !!!! shows intense emotion

"Just like you(,) I forgot about my promises and that(,) oh so important vow"

"But(,) my dear friend(,) this is where it ends"

"But tomorrow(,) you will be on your own while I did something with my life"

"For all the tears you caused(,) I will smile"

betrayal by friends is a hard thing to deal with, get over, and move on from.. it hurts... and you conveyed that pain well here... the shock... the hurt.... the anger... the bitterness... and the getting over and moving on.. well done... I enjoyed... :)

[micky]

Thank you so much for your review April I really appreciate it :)

[Lauriegirl]

This is lovely and very creatively penned..keep up the nice work

[micky]

Thanks so much Laurie;)

[MomzillaNC]

A journey of moving on, still entrenched in the resentment of the pain caused.

[micky]

Thank you for the review

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. :D

[Pushkar Prabhat]

nice attitude.
good poem.
still maybe review it once for grammar and punctuations.
i liked it.
:)

[micky]

Thanks so much :)

[Rene Salinas]

A reminiscent feeling of relationships having gone in different directions. Life does indeed have a funny way of bringing closure to some of those unresolved moments. I think that this might just have been one of them and it has a bit of resolve and "get me " sort of thing a bit of a bite. Only to come to that moment of security and departure which is important in order to cultivate individuality and probably sop being a mindless drone going through the motions but....

Friendship is always valuable.

Thankyou

[micky]

Thank you for your review Rene:)

[Rene Salinas]

Forgot to add there are a few issues with grammar and what not but I am sure you will correct them in due time all the best

[micky]

Oh gosh! I suck at grammar but i'll try and find them. Thanks Rene;)