Sincerely your broken son...

Sincerely your broken son...

A Poem by micky

He was sixteen
Barely a heart,
people viewed him as a machine
And that wasn't even the sad part
He never had a broken household
He wasn't a spoiled child and his behavior was fine
 He wasn't shy or bold
And yet his parents never had the time
A boy raised by a Nannies,soon to be left on his own
A boy unnoticed in school
His parents chose to be distant and leave him alone
His parents were cruel 
A boy afraid of life
A boy afraid of his own feeling
A boy simple afraid
A boy who will never have a wife
A boy who never knew the meaning...
to be saved
With his parents late to his funeral
 His Father saying "He took the easy way out"
"He was no man"
Witch is a bit brutal
Considering you left me no other rout
Considering  you're less than...
a man me, your son 
Now I hope you walk away with shame
This conversation may be done...
But know my death is on your hands.May you feel my pain
Sincerely your broken son... 

© 2014 micky


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You took the reader on a sad journey in the words. This does happen a lot. Reaction to situation too late leaving sadness and regret. I like the feel of letter in the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind words
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.



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this one brought a tear to my eye!

Posted 9 Years Ago


wow! your poems really touch me.

Posted 9 Years Ago


micky

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Marcus....i am so glad u enjoyed one of my poems
Micky, your poem seriously left me with goose bumps. The saddest part is that this is all too common. Many kids fall through the cracks and they pain is never detected. Thank you for taking us through this sad journey, if only to remind us to be ever open to the people around us.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the review i appreciate it :)
You took the reader on a sad journey in the words. This does happen a lot. Reaction to situation too late leaving sadness and regret. I like the feel of letter in the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind words
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.
Suicide is never the easy way out it actually takes more strength to kill yourself than many think, people cling to life no matter how hard it gets, however I do disagree with him in the regards to who's the blame. It was the character's choice to take his own life not the choice of his father. To try as your final act to make someone miserable for the rest of their life is what you choose then you obviously were not all that good of a person. The death is on his hands and his alone for we all make decisions and we must be willing to suffer the consequences of such actions. That all being said I did enjoy your poem despite the fact I disagree with the character in it, this poem is well written and easy to grasp. Great Job!

Suggestions: boy raised by a Nannies (You should take out the a)

Sincerely, Malister Mikey

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is packed with emotions. Sometimes kids are not able to communicate with their parents and it results to a really bad ending. All they ask is love, which they don't get. There are a few typos but if ignored, this is a lovely and heart touching poem. If this is what you feel than just know one thing- It would all be better. We all would find someone one day and realize why it didn't work out with others. I promise everything will be okay. Be strong.
Thank you for sharing this :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much :)
Thank you for sharing this poem. It has really touched me. A few months after my father died when I was 15, my ex-boyfriend committed suicide and I became depressed. I often wonder if I could have done something more to help him and to show him that I, his family, and so many of his friends cared.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

9 Years Ago

Thank you Angel :)
sad honest and heartfelt.........
i am sorry for your loss......
maybe now he will find peace and maybe some acknowledgement, appreciation and love in the next life.....
beautifully crafted.....
i loved it!!!
:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much :)
Something tells me that this one relates to the other one of yours that I just read, "Hate". I could be wrong, but either way I am sorry for the loss of your friend. Suicide does not just effect the person who commits it, it effects everyone around them. A few typos I saw and corrected (corrections are in parentheses):

A boy raised by a Nann(y),soon to be left on his own

A boy simpl(y) afraid

(Which) is a bit brutal

Considering you left me no other (route)

Really well done my friend.


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

9 Years Ago

They are connected his parents never had the time and everywhere he went he was misunderstood. Thank.. read more

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