Stranger

I let a stranger pour me one more

"How many so far?"

I told him I wasn't keeping score

"Whats a girl like you doing in a bar?"

I could ask him the same thing

But I already know the answer

What will the end of that bottle bring?

The truth..his a chancer

A boy trying to hold his ground like a man

A broken boy trying to forger his past

Searching for hope,searing for someone to say"you can"

He looks at me but his eyes are hollow

I don't think he can hold on 

I return his look except mine is filled with sorrow

"How old you kid?"coz if he guesses he'll be wrong

"Fifteen"

And your in a bar in the middle of the night

"Well life's been kinda mean"

He keeps staring ,maybe theres something wrong with his sight?

He takes my hand and says"im 22 and I gave up a long time ago"

"Do you know what I see when I look at you?"

I answer with a simple "No"

"Much more than I had"

There aren't words to describe my shock
"Well isn't that just sad"

 He digs in  his pocket and pulls out a lock

He says "Iv'e never owned the key so i's useless"

He says"Some things were meant to fail"

He says "You keep this"

I ask where you going?,He says"In 24hours I'll be in jail"

"You keep that lock to remind yourself your not one of those things"

Little does this stranger know

He saved me

But before he can go

I tell him my thanks and I hope he will be free

He says "It aint nothing you not gna do,it's what you choose to do"

He says "Im gna go put up a fight and Im not gna be sorry"

"Remember,make sure you put up a fight,and don't you dare say sorry if you know you right!"

"Remember me kid even when im in jail"

He has a note  in his hand

He says no matter what you never fail

He begins to stand

"You gna make mistakes and its gna hurt,but thats the point kid,i swear!"

"but before you go home"

''Im one of those people out there..."

And he hands me a poem

I start to read the words

Only to realize I wrote this piece

"It's supposed to hurt"

And with that he leaves

Thank you stranger 

Reviews

[Passengerr]

'He looks at me but his eyes are hollow
I don't think he can hold on
I return his look except mine is filled with sorrow' - loved that line. couldn't stop reading. This is brilliantly written Micky. funny how a stranger could leave a big impression on a persons day and perhaps life.

[micky]

Wow thank you Richie

[Valentine]

A very well written piece. It is expressed well and holds the readers interest to the end. Valentine

[micky]

thank you :)

[Echoes of Eros]

In each line you breathe this vision to life in our minds and hearts. There is a beautiful, dark depth in you that has been bringing me back to your writing, and I just love it. You're supposed to be a writer. xo

[micky]

Wow thank you so much Eros :) it means so much

[sereenaoutloud]

Really liked this...nice surprise ending! The story in this poem held my interest from start to finished! Great job! :)

[micky]

Thank you for the kind words im glad you liked my piece

[TheOne&Only]

Very touching! I soo didn't see that end coming. Very nice twist. Loved it! Thanks for sharing.

[micky]

aww thank you ...:)