You're the only one for me

 

 

 

Curled up together on this hard, bare floor,

With a blanket wrapped around us,

A warm feeling starts to unfurl.

My face in your neck hides my shy grin,

As my thoughts go back to the love we just made

Again, and again.

Your skin is so warm as I nuzzle your cheek.

I pray this moment never ends,

That we never fall asleep!

As your arms slip around me,

My heart skips a beat.

Our eyes drift shut,

Neither of us speak.

I give you one last kiss,

And whisper, soft and sweet,

"I love you, baby...

You're the only one for me."

 

Author's Note

Okay, so maybe my rhyming isn't perfect...but oh well. ^.^ I love this piece irregardless. I hope you will too!!

Reviews

[Markymark]

Basking in the afterglow...stuff inspiration is made of. I like the "real life" inspired pieces over the surreal and dark poetry. Good write. Free verse over strict style and meter probably work better for this kind of piece, but the reader doesn't have to work (think) at all. I do wonder though how lovely it might have been with a strict syllable count with a stress on the third or fourth word...just to give it some pizazz. This piece captures a great visual though and is something we all (most of us anyway) can relate to. I imagine the scene in front of a stone fireplace, strewn clothes about the room, a single red rose lying on the mantle along with two wineglasses. Oh yeah.

Thanks for sharing....more later.

Markymark

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

I love it, nothing wrong with the rhyming (If I knew what that is LOL) ... I love the simple words, who need more than just honest sweet words after a good love making, when you feel the deepest love feelings in your heart ? :-) ... Thank you , it was beautiful , Yossi

[melissa]

:) loved it!

[cest la vie]

Honey, who needs rhyme when the emotion felt in this piece is palpable.
Beautifully written..Such tenderness, love, longing. Wanting to encapsulate that moment and not let sleep take it away. Love this Bunnie!!

[Frederick E. Conkling]

I really liked it. So romantic, so beautiful. Well done my friend.

[MarkGMelvin]

very romantic.mm

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I love it too... I for one am not about rhyming I am about emotions and this was so precious... very sweet and sentimental... it are those little moments that mean the most... I get warm feeling inside just reading this.

[Psynexus]

Very romantic, a good example of those moments where silence and emotion rule and all cares in the world seem to slowly die away when you're with the one you love.

I didn't even catch the rhyming at all until I saw the author's note, haha. It's good regardless, but if you were trying to make it rhyme I didn't pick it up at all. ^_^

Good job. Where's my thumbs up emoticon...