The Formaldehyde Princess

Long, sticky fingers come prickling
Up my spine again.
I'm thinking 'bout that boy,
But he's not thinking 'bout me
Oh no.
I read somewhere today that
Enjoying life in your twenties is passé,
So I'll settle in to misery;
Curl up in it and stay still
Preserved forever at 28,
Pickled in this panicked age.

Author's Note

How's the punctuation? I usually don't use any. Would it be better without?

Reviews

[songstress]

Hey, Ms. Moon, I think your piece is fine as is. while, sad a subject you managed to bring a little light to the piece with some of the lines regarding fortunes and articles on appreciating youth. most can relate to the idea fearing getting older or not catching that special someone's eye.

and to top it off your title is real catchy, I'm glad that you began to write due to a phrase being stuck in your head. otherwise, no one would be able to see what a good piece you could write. :)

[Missie Moon]

Thanks so much for the review. I really appreciate it. The late twenties are a weird time because I never anticipated the pressure to settle down and start a family and in my mind I barely feel like any time has passed since I was a student.

[songstress]

you're welcome and I'm sure there are others like yourself feeling the same way. I mean I recall entering college for the first time, and meeting a girl who was only two years older than me, already discussing her wedding and flaunting a ring. It's sort of a surreal experience when you look into another's life. But, really when your set on your own life and goals things like settling down, having a family, ect., can be a little less daunting or dream-like. Nonetheless, great work on your poem. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Our society is strange. We hold standards in our head that no longer hold true in our world. It will get better, just maybe not in the way you expect. Very neat title, and great tie in at the end.