When The Dark Rises

When the old brick buildings crumble apart as this cracked sky falls,
When the world becomes consumed with all this strife,
Death scattered, limpless laying dolls,
Death, eternal reigning master over life.


When the dark from the night rises,
When we are brutally punished with pain,
Cursed with nothing but silencing prizes,
Cursed with nothing but a peaceful rain.


We call and cry, we pray and scream,
We see and look, we hear and listen,
From the sky, the shimmering gleams,
From the sky, the light does fall; watch it glisten.


When the dark rises, look for the light in the black of night,
When the dark rises, the angels of the moon, pure, cry tears,
Their eyes blinded; beaded sparkles shield their sight,
Their eyes blinded; hearts from the darkness vanish our fears.







Mizuki Tsukiakari

Reviews

[falling_toxic_rain]

the stanzas are eye catching because of the repetition of the first two lines, great strategy.
Great write,
-rain

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

Thank you for your review and your kind words. I was a little unsure about repeating the begining of the stanzas, but I guess it all worked out : )

[falling_toxic_rain]

haha yea it really makes your piece eye catching. and no problem ^^

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

I just reviewed your poem "Fallen Angel", but sadly my computer is stupid and my review did not post. I will have to repost it when I can, but I will simply say now that I really enjoyed it : )

[falling_toxic_rain]

it's okay and thanks for your review. I very much appreciate it. :)