From Ashes...

Deciding to live to the best of my abilities - recovering from depression...

From your ashes again you will rise
from the cloak and armour you so despise.

Whatever ember beneath the smoke may still reside
within your heart, you shall not suppress or try to hide.

See your mind freed and hands untied,
take what you've always yourself denied.

Breathe life into slumbering ember before extinguished,

be certain before allowing last hope to be relinquished.

The ember still hot and grudgingly alight

- It is too easy to give in without a fight.

 

Mai L. Nissen, 2013

Author's Note

Criticism and suggestions are well recieved :)

Reviews

[SuspectGray]

Keep the ember burning...as long as it does there is hope. Depression is never easy, I hope writing down your thoughts helps.

[Misery]

Nicely written. My euphemism for depression is the 'Valley of Ghosts'.
I wish you well for those times when you must journey through your own valley of ghosts.
Keep writing and keep sharing, dear poet.

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for taking the time to read it and for your kind review. Much appreciated :)

[Misery]

You are welcome, dear poet.

[E G TEN]

Simply constructed yet powerfully defined, I love the concept of your poem, I too would like to rise from the ashes someday and see what could have been or what not" Thanks for sharing and looking forward to reading the rest of your art works ;)

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for your kind review! I hop that you will rise from the ashes someday :)

[Nene]

The poem is wonderfull with an amazing message. Too often we see people, teenagers and adults too, who have little confidence in themselves and usually give in to depression of some other fear and do not go to thier full potential.... You can count me in, in that category.. But I do get up after sometime.....:D
One think I would suggest is, could you use commas.... It will give the reader a more sense of how the poem is proceeding... The flow is perfect but commas could guide the reader along the :D

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts, Nene. I will consider your suggestion :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is hard to rise up when we have this feeling of not deserving...

we have to knock that off ourselves, and go after what we want with confidence.

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for taking the time to read and review, Jacob.
Yes, too many know this problem unfortunately.