Words that just.. kill you.

Words that just.. kill you.

A Poem by mmzx
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Something, that just occurred hours ago.

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'Murni, you failed.', said my teacher.
Those words pierced through my heart,
like an ice pick to the chest.
It hurt real bad, worst than anything else.

For a moment, I did not know what to feel.
I caught a bullet shot through my body.
My mind switched off, I was blank.

I felt like leaving the place at that point of time.
I felt so down, so crushed, so hurt and so.. weak.
I failed.. in the most important event of my life.
I did not want to continue being there, being here.
Honestly, I thought of quitting. I thought of everything.
Where did all the hard work go to? Where did it vanish?

I cried. I let it all out.
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The feeling of being let down.
The feeling of being upset and shock.
The feeling.. of failing.

© 2010 mmzx


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Ouch. Words are the most destructive things in the world, and yet the most calming as well. It's such a double edged sword eh? I really like how you put a story into this, and also expressed the emotions necessary to go with the title of this poem. Words are the most powerful things ever, and we need to learn how to use them properly. This was awesome!
-Yin

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Ouch. Words are the most destructive things in the world, and yet the most calming as well. It's such a double edged sword eh? I really like how you put a story into this, and also expressed the emotions necessary to go with the title of this poem. Words are the most powerful things ever, and we need to learn how to use them properly. This was awesome!
-Yin

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I felt for you while reading. The crushing waves of failure, we have all felt them at more than one occasion. (I think you mean worse at line 4) But other than that, it was just brilliant. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Words can be so destructive.. and are at times intended to be so. How horrid though for a teacher to speak like this to a student. Such was said of Thomas Edison. That he was unteachable. His mother ended up teaching him from home. If not for his inventions we might not even have this Cafe. Find those who speak life not death.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can totally relate to this now. That's exactly what I'm feeling for the past week, not knowing where I went wrong and thinking you're a failure. But don't worry, there's still tomorrows and you can still do better on the upcoming events :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I know what you're talking about. Just believe in yourself and everything will be okay!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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mmzx

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I go by the name Munn. I am 16, I think. I like poetry writing. I like reading quotes. I like acoustic music. Also, I like you. more..

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