Never Ending

Something I wrote describing my anxiety about life that is somewhat depressing.

How long will I have to wait

Until the day exposes to me

All the things I have surpassed

And the moments meant to be

 

Fate has lasted this long inside

Bartering the little boy within

Felt so wide between the pride

Knowing the life upon the sin

 

To gain the piece of the puzzle

I must take the man inside out

Killing the burden hanging over

Always been hearing the shout

 

Obviously known what is in view

The circles spinning in a new motion

Pride swallows up in walking strides

All of these senses inside conclusion

 

I never abide by the rules anymore

I know that my time has unruly come

I understand now the timeless clock

All that dies withers under the gun

Reviews

[Kshitij Srivastava]

It's a clean and consistent poem. The language is simple yet rich with a genuine theme. So good, that for once, i thought of rewriting the whole thing here :p
On a more personal note, i would have loved a pattern in your rhyming scheme but it's more of a creative choice. I respect your choices and love the poem :)