Out

I want You.

Do not even ask.

 

I want Your future

          Your happiness.

 

I could care less about mine.

But I won't deny, I've dreamt about Our castle.

 

I need You.

I need You to want this,

                 to want me.

                 Or I will cease to exist.

 

I take every word so seriously,

        Don't You know that?

        Without You, my life simply laughs in my face.

 

Your promises are on the top of my list

and my priorities revolve around them.

              Just another one of my Female Cliche's,

              Waiting to manifest.

 

If You change Your mind now,

my world comes crashing down at lightning speed.

              My hopes and dreams,

                   a suicide jumper.

 

I won't do this without You.

                If Your not in it,

 

                I am Out.

 

 

Reviews

[Last Lying Look]

I really liked this one as well.
It ALSO reminds me of myself.

"Your promises are on the top of my list

and my priorities revolve around them.

Just another one of my Female Cliche's,

Waiting to manifest.



If You change Your mind now,

my world comes crashing down at lightning speed.

My hopes and dreams,

a suicide jumper."

I like that. It's got an interesting edge to it.
I also liked the way you set up the words on the page.
Really neat.
Great write.
-E.R

[the_ese]

i read this line " my simple life laughs in my face." as " my life simply laughs in my face".. possible revision?? just thought it was curious .. but on the ps. ii can totally relate to this. i wish i could stop wanting those that dont want in return.