Odysseus Lost

Bribing the muses...

To think that you

haven't made my life

a little brighter

is laughable.

To think that I used you

(and love, your words

not mine)

is incomprehensible, to know

what you've done to my mind

you would quickly

sing a different tune

("I seem to be struck by you"--

how fitting indeed)

and perhaps be willing

to share my life

once again.

 

I thought I gave thanks,

I thought we were clear

in the beginning,

but often, in love, and letters,

lines get muddled

and smeared.

 

I dont know how

to repay you,

or get back

in your graces,

nor do I know

if you think of me

at all.

 

It's okay, I think

it is, anyways.

I could pick up

the bottle, don the slippers,

and become someone

I am NOT.

 

I could become

bitter, cynical--

or wait--

Or I could become

the best I can,

with you in mind.

 

Reviews

[Simply Profound]

Hmm. Fallout and uncertain optimism. I love the shaky, flickering hope in lines like "It's okay, I think it is, anyways." and the beautiful twist ending, still seeming unsure of itself but clear in its intentions.

After reading a few of your works I felt like certain areas were slightly wordy, like things could have been streamlined a tad. But this wastes no words. It is direct, with a voice so natural yet powerful. Well done.

[Tommy]

I truly love this piece, because I can relate.

"I thought I gave thanks,
I thought we were clear
in the beginning,
but often, in love, and letters,
lines get muddled
and smeared."

What a wonderful expression of feeling. No truer words have been spoken about the trials of love in my life.
Great work!
RLG,
Tommy

[Little Blue]

We read The Odyssey in class a couple of months ago. As always this poem holds a beautiful rhythm and message. Thanks for the great read.

[Alz Alz]

I could become
bitter, cynical--
or wait--

Or I could become
the best I can,
with you in mind.

BEAUTIFUL! What a beautiful poem, very well written, I love the ending especially.... 100/100