Can You Hear Me Now????

Bad Choices

 

I built a house for you

Searched for rope and twine to make a shelter

Dug around for the spot of land

With blood and sweat I built you this palace.

And you tore it down

Kicking the walls and clawing at the doors.

Trying to get free

To dig your way out

Now you have almost ripped this place apart

Looking out into the wide open land of freedom

And now what???

Now you are looking back at what you destroyed.

Wanting your home back?

Wanting to keep things the way you had them

When before I warned you that its dangerous out there

And you stuck your neck out.

Danced with the danger of life.

Without listening to anyone

You took a risk

And made a bad choice.

You shattered the home we had

And now you cant take it back

I cant save you this time

You are on your own

Can you hear me now?

 

 

Reviews

[fireblossom]

Did she miss the signals or was she too young or inexperienced or did he not know what he wanted and faked her out? Whatever, she did her best and he wanted out. We learn that what are to us pretty walls can be to them prison bars. This poem shows the results of two paths diverging. She has learned enough not to allow him back to do more damage. Though she is still bitter that will pass. She will heal and move on a wiser woman.

[Kimberly S]

i dont think thats reasonable... i think that once your gone.. your gone. If he didnt know already he was gonna find out.. you cant do everything.

[David Lewis Paget]

I was in two minds about this piece; at first I thought you might be talking to your dog about its kennel or enclosure, then maybe to a teenager, anxious to leave home. But finally I came around to thinking that you were, indeed, talking to an ex. There's plenty of red-blooded angst here, and righteous frustration. What was that old saying? If you have a bird in a cage, let it go. If it comes back, it's yours... If it doesn't, it never was in the first place. I think that's a reasonable analogy.
David.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This has grit and angst and a kick in the butt to boot! I loved it. 8th line from the bottom, "without" a simple typo simply fixed, nothing really, I've got no helpful things to add, just a great piece here.