Raining Tears

They ricochet off the windows,

pleading to get in,

when the sun rises they will dry up and disappear,

let them in

let them in.

They swarm in packs and cry and cry.

They fear the thunder,

fear the lightning.

Let them in

let them in

*tap tap tap*

They beg and plead

but you don't even notice.

The thunder booms the lightning crackles,

let them in

let them in.

*tap tap tap tap*

faster now

pouring down hard and sharp

They are pleading

you refuse.

let then in

LET THEM IN!!!!

I run to the shutters and

tear open the hatch.

They pour in on the floor.

I fall to the ground with a smile on my face.

They are in

they are in.

They fall to the ground with me and rest

by morning they have left,

they are grateful.

All that is left of the night before is one

tiny drop on my cheek.

The question that still remains

A drop or a tear?

Author's Note

New poem of mine. Not my best but I hope you ike it. Please review and you can be harsh please please!!!! I need critical reviews evewry once in a while so I can fix things so be harsh!!!!

Reviews

[sarcastic]

i got to go pea now

[Daydreamer54]

I thought this peome was very cute! It has great sense of wonder and imagination. U gave the rain droplets great personification!

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

Well no critics here i like it the passion the personification is great and then the ending question leaves a kind of mystery to it.

[The Water Queen]

I love the uniqueness that this has taken form of. The thought of rain wanting to just be let in. This is sweet and beautiful. Great job.

[chaotic katie]

no need for any harshness savy this poem rocked i love the ending so poetic and creative, great job savy.

[Haifa]

I like this poem a lot, you did a great job. Also, it can be as lyrics I think... "let them in let them in, they are in they are in.. "
Well, good poem and well done.

[♥(heatherawesome..]

i like ths poem a lotand it may not be your best copy and i think that you did awesome on it and i still like the poem lol lol lol and i loveeeeeeeeeeeee ittttttttttttttttttt

[Drew]

I liked this and I love rain but i'm not gonna open my windows and let it pour in haha. I really liked though how you said like the rain is banging on your window cause it wants to come in and get away from the thunder that was cool.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

To be honest, when I first began this poem, I thought tears and rain...here we go again. The theme can easily turn into a train wreck. I was pleasantly surprised to see tears and rain tied together in a way I've never seen before. I liked the imagery you inspired in this piece. Your originality and creativity shines in this piece. This was great!

[I'llPlayTheJuliet]

I like this too, it was a uniqueness too it, that I enjoyed.
Great job, once again. :D