His eyes

This poem is based on a true story of mine. Please rate and review. Thank you for reading.

In the midst of my redemption

I solely have one confession

Yet I’m afraid to confront the truth

 

You look at me

Your eyes seem honest and sincere

The murky pool of your eyes

Remains unclear

 

I see his face

His amber eyes

A beast in lamb’s skin

The hue of your eyes darkens

I trusted you once

You trusted my innocence

 

Set me free

For I am a captive to my past

The smile on your face never lasts

Your beast within

Destroyed everything I know

I am the clay

You moulded me into the person,

I am today

 

Yet I shall carry this secret to my grave

One day I shall be saved

Author's Note

Please rate and review my poem. Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[John Anderson]

very, very nice...keep up the good work

[Nusquam Esse]

I liked this piece, especially the play on the idea of trust, "You trusted my Innocence". Its a terrible feeling knowing that you have been played, and even after the fact, you feel like they still have control over you, because in a way, they have made you who you are. As you put it, we are all clay, and it is difficult to learn how to mold ourselves, and not let others twist us.

[sonnetmoon]

Thank you for your review Nusquam Esse. I have noticed that you have reviewed several of my poems and for that I am truly grateful.
-sonnetmoon

[katnisscat]

That was really deep. The emotion was clear and the easy you drove your point home took great effect because of the words you used. I love it!!

[sonnetmoon]

Thank you for your review Katnisscat. I am glad that you 'love it!'. If you want me to read any of your work you are welcome to send me a reading request.
-Sonnetmoon

[Sami Khalil]

"Set me free



For I am a captive to my past



The smile on your face never lasts



Your beast within



Destroyed everything I know



I am the clay



You moulded me into the person,



I am today"

A splendid read and write...:)........................

[sonnetmoon]

Thank you for your review Sami Khalil. If you want me to read any of your work you can send me a reading request. Also I am glad that you enjoyed reading my poem.
-Sonnetmoon

[Sami Khalil]

I just posted a new one titled: Imperium...Feel free at your leisure...:)..................

[Perkele.7885]

You look at me

Your eyes seem honest and sincere

The murky pool of your eyes

Remains unclear


This stanza confuses me a bit! honest and sincere, yet murky and unclear

[sonnetmoon]

'Your eyes seem honest and sincere' ' The murky pool of you eyes remains unclear' ... The protagonist thought that he was a loving kind person but they realised that there can be many sides to a person.
Eye colour is made up of multiple colours just like a persons personality.

[Perkele.7885]

i need to expand the box but, I can make that work! Thanks!

[ayosonolowo]

That is true
really heart touching
but only if one understand the deep meaning
nice one
thanks for sharing

[sonnetmoon]

Thank you for reading my poem. I am glad you found my poem heart touching.

[Shanil Mehdi]

I understand the poem quite well, you did a good job with it. I especially liked your metaphors that only added to the strength of your piece and created an emotional atmosphere. keep it up.

[sonnetmoon]

Thank you for reviewing my work. I will continue to write more.
-sonnetmoon

[Shanil Mehdi]

you're most welcome and i look forward to reading more of your work. :P