Dreams of a Lone Wolf

I felt like writing about dreams.

Dreams of a Lone Wolf

As I drifted off I dreamed.

I had a real family, not just moss clumps I called my pups.

My mate was loving, my parents the very same.

All my wrongdoing was forgotten.

And then I woke up.

The next night I dreamed my life was worse than it is.

There was a war. I could not hide.

Everywhere I stayed there were enemies.

Everyone was against each other.

Nobody forgave me.

And then I woke up.

The night after that my dream was empty.

I roamed in blackness.

In solitude.

I took this time alone to understand my dreams.

To understand myself.

I learned to remember what life could be and treasure it,

And to be thankful for what I had, knowing it could be worse.

I had learned my life lesson.

I never dreamed again.

Author's Note

It was supposed to be kind of sad.

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

Good write, some minor errors. The flow was good, and teaches a good life lesson. The last two lines seem a little forced. What about "And from my dreams I learn the reality of life" ...yeah i dont know either. Just some thoughts. Look forward to more.

[Skye Fields]

Ooh, chilling! Especially the last line. Very sad, very poignant. To make it more effective, I would say "I had learned my lesson" in the second to last line, instead of "my life lesson," which sounds condescending and preachy, like a poem a disappointed grandma would write to her granddaughter. The same applies to the whole last stanza. I would avoid using phrases like "I learned to remember what life could be and treasure it" that sound like a generic greeting card. You're a good writer, so you can make these emotions believable without telling the reader directly.

I like the structure you've chosen. You dream your life is better, you dream your life is worse, you dream of nothing at all. The second stanza is probably my favorite. I wouldn't change a thing. It's simple, powerful, and has the fear and detachment of someone who's been through war. The line "Nobody forgave me" is extra-potent. It raises all kinds of unanswered questions, which adds a layer of mystery to the piece.

Great work! Keep it up!