Sorcerer

Well and I can see you clearly in my astro 
sleep state my third eye is wide awake so
you better tread carefully and save your desire
for me only or I will turn you into a worthless
cornsnake 'cuz one way or another it's us
forever...a submissive slave or a perpetual
lover you can't break the spell I have you
under and my every command will be your
will be your every determination with the
slightest wave of my hand...so I'm warning
you while you are out and about tonight
you better watch yourself 'cuz I'm watching
you and even though your star shines so
bright I hold the keys to your destiny and
you will be mine forever…never underestimate
the power of the Sorcerer...I hold the keys to 
your destiny...so mote it be!

Reviews

[caesarkreshen]

Scary piece! haha. Like one of those 80s love songs that you listen to the lyrics and it's like holy crap this is insane.

I'm not sure how I feel about it. It certainly has tone and undertone. Perhaps it loses a bit near the end. I don't like the phrase keys to your destiny in this poem. I feel like with everything else said... cornsnake, etc, it could be more potent. Just my 2c.

[Bo Lanier]

thx for reading my poem.