The eyes

this is just the intro paragraph..tell me what you think

          Running, it’s all she could do at this point. She runs to get Away, to get away from what’s coming after her. It’s the Witches hour on a cold, dark, raining night. The wind howls through the trees, shaking and moving them frantically. Everything around her makes this night so much more deadly. Her legs slowly give way from under her, her feet are bleeding from the distance she has traveled, her heart is about to erupt from her chest, but she cant stop running. Branches breaking from their trees, she trips over one of them, and falls hard onto the wet, cold ground. She hears a crack, then realizes, its her ankle which is now broken, impairing her from running any further. All she is able to do is lie there and wait. In the Distance, she can faintly make out the figure of a man starting towards her. Screaming, she hopes it will scare him off, but she has no luck and he still ventures forward. He approaches her slowly, her heart pounding faster and faster. He’s right over her, a flash of lightning above illuminates his face just enough for her to see her killers cold, dark, eerie eyes. She screams one more time….