Sweet dreams

Sweet dreams

A Poem by Arman

Sweet dreams


It’s just my sweet dreams
In which you love me
But my dreams are my life
You have to trust me
We won't know each other
Unless in unity
We are meant to love
I experience in my dreams
We both being together

Hopefully my dreams will come true


© 2017 Arman


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Arman
I really need for yours advice, instruction or honestly reviews.

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I think it is very sweet and a very calming piece. I hope your dream comes true

Posted 8 Years Ago


Arman

8 Years Ago

thanks for nice pray.
I like it it is sweet.
I would say, "we are meant a love" not "to love" to help it flow to the next line
also again with the flow maybe "of us both" instead of "we"
Then again I am not you and I am unsure how you are wanting it read.
This is a beautiful concept of a daydreamer, a hopeless romantic, and much more. I absolutely love it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Arman

8 Years Ago

thanks for nice review and advice.
Rachael Lea

8 Years Ago

You are most certainly welcome.
Rachael Lea

8 Years Ago

Thank you for sharing
Very sweet and emotional. I like it

Posted 8 Years Ago


Arman

8 Years Ago

thanks so much.
Alexandra Hounschell

8 Years Ago

You are welcome.
A very good poem. Filled with real emotions and thoughts. When we know real love. We will live and die for love. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Arman

8 Years Ago

thank you for nice review.
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

You are welcome.
This is a well-written, sweet poem that most anyone could relate to. Who hasn't had a relationship with another person, but only in their dreams? This part is clear & full of hope.

Many people write love poems like this, so it's not a problem . . . but for me, I like a love poem that tells us more about the people involved. This is all made up of general statements about love. Again, nothing wrong with this & many people write like this.

I find myself wondering, what is the situation? Why only in dreams, why not in real life? Is she married to someone else? Is she too young? Does she live far away? It only makes a poem more meaningful, when you add more details about the people, the surroundings (always remember to include the senses: What does it look like? smell like? sound like?) Who is this person the narrator is longing for? Why does she/he hold such a strong attraction? These are the details that make a poem ORIGINAL -- YOUR poem, not just like a hundred other love poems.

I don't mean these comments as a suggestion to change this poem. It's good as it is. But in the future, for your upcoming poems, just think about adding more specific information so we can be part of the story.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Arman

8 Years Ago

Really nice! i liked it. i will do it! thanks for this good idea.
this is a really beautiful

Posted 8 Years Ago


this is so beautiful. I love this, it is so sweet.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Rose Jaeger Kaneki

8 Years Ago

yes, welcome
Arman

8 Years Ago

that is OK.
thanks
Rose Jaeger Kaneki

8 Years Ago

welcome!!!!!!!!!!
a sweet write... i think your words expressing the true feelings of your heart.... beautifully expressed.... clapping for your effort... well done Jess.... full ratings....

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Arman

8 Years Ago

you the man. thanks and nice life for you.
You must understand that I am no expert on poetry or the writing of poetry ... I dabble in poetry, because anyone can set their thoughts to pen and page ... Ocassionally, I may produce a piece that someone thinks is a bit noteworthy, or that speaks to someone's heart, but over all I doubt that I will go down in the annals of history as a great or renowned poet ... Like you, I am a writer ... A writer must writer or cease to being a writer ... Now, though your pen may not yet have scrawled to page the finest love poem ever written, that does not mean you will not do so in time, as practice does not truly make perfect, but practice does help us all to improve ... The point is, when speaking words from your heart to a woman, the perfection of poetry matters not a diddly squat, because it is to look into your eyes and see that you truly mean the words you have spoken that will bear you a chance of winning her heart ... Or not ... One never knows with a woman ... I am going to speculate that in your native language this piece carries forth much more meaning and emotion than you are currently able to translate and transform into English ... I think you have penned a very noble effort ... I can only speak and write one language: English ... I cannot begin to imagine learning to speak yet another language, much less how to learn to convey my innermost feelings into that language in a manner that will allow others to correctly view my heart penned to page ... My hat is off to you ... That is a compliment here in America ... Keep writing ...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Arman

8 Years Ago

thanks for so nice review i really appreciate it.
Hello I am Dracula's son. No no! Jk JP lol

It is a bit of a quagmire, but a good poem keep up the good work :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Arman

8 Years Ago

your welcomes.

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