Death Surrounds Me

A feeling that I abhor

Death surrounds me
A feeling hounds me
There is something that I know
So low, I took the blow
But death surrounds me

Death surrounds me
There's no one around me
No one listens to a hoe
There is something that I know
But death surrounds me

Death surrounds me
Living life drowns me
There is something that I know
If I've been killed less more than no
But death surrounds me

Death surrounds me
Their limits bound me
If I was alive I'd glow
There is something that I know
But death surrounds me

A black cloud raining tar
He sits above and plays guitar
A melody that sounds so sweet
But to rise to heaven would be a treat
I'm alive but I'm not living
I'd be good but I'm just sinning
Because death surrounds me

Reviews

[Zayir]

I love this piece. It almost feels like someone can use these for lyrics in a song haha.

[Ariana Omnomnom]

Someone probably could.

[송지ፏ..]

Nice, I liked the descriptions, but I think you should change each of the first lines per paragraph.

[Ariana Omnomnom]

The reason I used the same was for the repetitio. It's to show that my mind keeps coming to the same thought. That the mood hangs around my neck like a noose.