Morning Mind

Morning Mind

A Poem by nickchidiac

A lonely vibration wakes me from my slumber,

And grants me wicked whims to wonder,

Like abandoned ships I beg to plunder,

It turns me over,

It turns me under,

My manic joy is cast asunder.

That thoughtless thief’s thrown storms of thunder

What tomorrow sees for you and me,

Taken from these thoughts I breed,

And for the love of god and greed,

I long to leave you loved indeed,

But memories have long decreed,

You better off in the arms of he.

So leave my love

And leave my need,

And leave my mourning mind to me.

© 2010 nickchidiac

Author's Note

its a bit sad but when it hits you, it hits you I guess. Plus I pretty much dig it. What do you think?

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great poem

Posted 13 Years Ago

this is very good. i like the way you write this. kat24

Posted 13 Years Ago

It's very catchy.

"It turns me over,
It turns me under"
I very much like the simplicity of those two lines. but they're in depth too.

Posted 13 Years Ago

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I really loved this poem. It just amazing. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago

This was very well written. This is one of my favorite poems taht ive read on here.

Posted 13 Years Ago

You can definitely tell that music has a huge influence on you. Your poem read like a song, and it didn't seem like you tried hard to rhyme. Amazing write.
"You['re?] better off in the arms of he."

Posted 13 Years Ago

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I like this, it's brief and too the point. Speaks of another stealing your gal but are you sure..
Very well written, loved reading it and made this reader think about things.

Posted 13 Years Ago

The language is great. I really like the rhyme too. That's a bit depressing at the end. Did you mean "You're better off in the arms of he"?

Posted 13 Years Ago

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touching and sad, but well penned..

Posted 13 Years Ago

reads like a song~ well constructed rhyme scheme~ flows smooth down the page~
strong topic well presented~

Posted 13 Years Ago

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18 Reviews
Added on August 3, 2010
Last Updated on August 3, 2010



Walnutport, PA

Hey my name is Nick. I'm 20 and I like to write. Music is a huge influence in my life and my ipod has 12,000 great songs and is pretty much my prized possession. I write what I feel and that is someti.. more..


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