An Average Night

It’s a Wednesday night

And I expectedly find myself sitting in a car

Making pointless conversations

With the closest thing I have to a companion

Talking of our sadly minute sexual triumphs.

In between the most random quotes of our dialogue

We stare

And wonder

About dozens of careless patrons

As this car is parked outside of a gas station,

Symbolically named ‘Square One’.

Two cars sit to our left

And as the operators shake hands and part ways,

We mock their infant drug deal

And scoff at the dressing patterns

Of the modern students of our former high school.

We read to each other the words of a poetic story teller

From our ash-covered laps.

As we choke our lungs

With paper-coated sticks of poison,

We drown our emptiness

In the juice we paid for in silver and copper.

With a spark of his lighter

And a drag of his cigarette

He looks at me and asks

“Is this what our life is?”

Not yet.

Author's Note

just another boring night, hanging out in front of a gas station.

Reviews

[heich]

like it..lol

[Michael of Gilead]

Yup, just another night with nothing to do...well done

[Chelsea.]

Wonderful. I like how you can take something so simple, and make it poetic, important, symbolic, and other words, aha.

Favorite lines:: " With paper-coated sticks of poison,
We drown our emptiness
In the juice we paid for in silver and copper."

[Kira]

Simple, yet deep. And like everyone else, I thought the last three lines packed the hardest punch.

[Candylove.]

I love how your mind works, ha. How you're able to transcend what you see and feel into words, is amazing. So clever, and honest. I reallllllly liked this. Good work, as always. :)

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Beautiful peom with a beautiful ending! love it!

[jen]

i really like this.... but when i got to the last three lines... that's what made me smile and love it..... such a simple statement, but one that everyone can relate to at some and many points in our lives.. really well done

[BreedsWithDragons]

We mock their infant drug deal.

laughing at amateurs never gets old

[x]

Man, great write. Full of pointlessness.
It feels like life sliding away, unattended.
The bland trivia of it all.
Glad I can simply smile and turn the page on this one...but that sounds rude so let me add, thank you for creating the scene for all to enjoy.

[dfz]

i know this all too well. very descriptive and good choice of words