Overrated

Love is overrated and happiness can be debated
I could seize the day and listen to what wise men say
But there’s always tomorrow to break me in half then laugh
I overthunk and sunk myself deeper into this pothole
Of unreachable goals
I got a mouthful of doubtful poems
Uncertainty of eternity
Trust is a bubble burst by lust
But then again who would put trust in a bubble
Too easily broken
So I'm outspoken
Choking on silence
Who knew zipped lips were a form of violence
Unseen out of sight
A blind mind is out of thought
Deliberation is existence
Impulsiveness is demise
So I’ll reflect and cause the sun to rise
Smile and be conquered
Because each empty line on paper
Is an opportunity missed
A waste of space
Space is waste
Displace the rat race
And call the cats in
Get the cages rattling
Because the early mouse
Gets the cheese with the trap
Questioning and ready wins the race
Slow and steady falls victim to cat’s claw
Cats paw is the last thing the rat saw

Author's Note

I know "overthunk" isn't exactly a word, but I used it in this piece anyways because it "fit".

Reviews

[Con O'Clast]

I love the language play. Overthunk works well, I say use your poetic license as much as you like, if it fits well and we can guess what it means, throw it in! The rapid fire imagery is fantastic, I particularly like 'I'll reflect and cause the sun to rise', as if action perpetuates time as opposed to the other way round. Also the word play at the end is very sharp. I really like your poetry, I look forward to reading more.

[Samuel Pennell]

I love the use of "overthunk," also "choking on silence" was pretty brilliant. I love it. Please give my poems a read. Peace!

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

Review for Change the World Comp.

Supreme word craft throughout. 'I got a mouthful of doubtful poems', yeah know the feeling, ha ha.

[soliloquy]

You write music! Rap or hip hop no doubt.

[Gray Witch]

Poetic licence ="overthink".... Love it.....