A Trivium

based on a dream

Victor and his girlfriend Eva are at the park when all of a sudden a drive by occurs and unlucky for them they got caught in the middle of it
victor quickly ducks her head down under the cement table they were sitting and and he covers him self over her, it seems the shootings are over. so he peeks out... its all clear

"oh s**t eva its over lets take our selves and lets leave.., eva?

shes been shot in the head she wasnt so lucky

"OH NO NO NO BABY PLEASE NO WHAT THE HELL"

in relationship with her ever since they were in elementary its very sad to lose what youve been friends with since youve been alive she was only 19 and he's 20

at the funeral you could imagine the sorrow he had in his heart
he got on his zx280 and drove off into the desert roads of el paso angry at himself
blasting up the volume to WASP mean man driving closer to a hitch hiker he notices its a female with the same resemblance of his lost dear Women he drives to the side of the rode, gets off and confronts this female hiker she's the dame brown long hair brown eyes and tanned skin like Eva, "Eva!! Eva " he goes to hug this women and crys out of joy

"get off of me im not Eva"

"but you... please tell me who you are please" all sobbing

"im evas twin sister evelyn" she said smiling
"i heard he passed so im going over to visit or grave"

"you look.. she never told me she had a twin. oh eva i miss you so much please dont leave me please i never told you how much i love you ill die for you i wish i died instead"

"GET OFF of me i told you im not eva now leave me alone"

"but you look so much like her, where did you come from anyways how do you know"

"hey i dont like you you ask to many questions! leave me alone"

"please at least let me take you there its dangerous out here"
"fine"

and the sight she leaves evas grave stone some flowers she pulled out from under her bag

they left the sight and he bugun to beg again
"please! can you stay with me i miss her so much. you look just like her can you be with me"

"no i dont love you"

"i promise to treat you as you are and ill treat you good and ill keep you safe"

"no"

"why cant you love me"

"your creepy leave me alone i dont love you i never will

" oh eva please dont leave me sweet honey bunny of mine please stay with me"

"i said no"

from a distance comes walking a young lady with a black dress and hair the the side like they did in the 90s

"hi victor" it was another girl that looked just like eva and evelyn
    victor was shocked "what the hell"
"hi victor im Evanie, im not eva  but i can love you i know how sad you are or must be i can replace your love" she said ever so sweetly and comforting he began to cry like a baby in her arms, "well i cant love you but she can" said evelyn. victor calmed down and there was evanie nurturing him and making him feel better healing his sadness they were in his room face to face talking

"i love you evan...evanie.." he smiled

"oh i love you to victor ill make you happy sweetheart my lovely love that i love so much" she warmed his heart. he didnt for get he loved eva first but shes gone and this new love replacement felt so warm and beautiful, hell keep in mind and respect eva and make sure to protect and keep evanie safe from danger make sure he dies before her protector her till the day he dies.

they held hands and she kissed his forehead both side of his face and lastly his lips when out of nowhere a soccer ball comes breaking through the window and hits evanie in the head, she falls to the floor and dies instantly

"NOOOOOO WHAT THE F**K"

She died a freakish accident and he was alone once more

evelyn comes in the room and grabs flowers from her bag and lays them on the grave stone that appeared out of nowhere, she says a prayer puts on her hat  and one tear falls just one

victor starts crying like a little girl who just lost her favorite doll
he couldnt help him self he lost another love of his and he turns to evelyn and hugs her

"no no why did this happen why!!!!! first eva now her i started to love her for her! why did she leave tell me why"

"it just happened she was our twin and now im the only one left..."
"WHY cant you love me"

"because i wasnt meant to be with you"

Reviews

[Alphachad]

WTF LMFAO you got really really crazy ideas HAHAHAH. If you try to fix everything from punctuations to coherency you'd probably make a badass story. For now i'll laugh my a*s off xD

[humansalwayswantmore;it..]

lol! what the hell ? lol ahahhahaha

"OH NO NO NO BABY PLEASE NO WHAT THE HELL"< that was funny man =]

[nighttimesnoozer]

:D oh man !!

[Goodbye]

Wow oh wow!

I love the dialogue, but then you throw a soccer ball killing the replacement woman and I laughed my a*s off!

I know you don't want to hear about grammar, but I'd go over it just once more, then this very good peace will be excellent!

I also loved what I think is the fundamental moral - we have to grieve; we can't just replace. It's so unfair to put those expectations on the replacement.