Feels Like....

(11/23/16 6:43am)

Fog
captured
in your
head

Feeling like
the
walking
dead

So easy to forget
So hard to learn

The will to live
has to be earned

Always expending energy you don't have
Those stuck with you see you as daft

As pointless as a sphere
Your life's meaning isn't clear

Everything was Technicolor
In such a pretty pose
Now there's static
Black and white
and the leaves have left the rose
So that no sunlight can reach it

You're left out in the cold

When everything is s**t
Why bother growing old?

Reviews

[Poetic License]

"So easy to forget
So hard to learn

The will to live
has to be earned"

Wow. There is such power in this statement. This entire work has a very "dystopian" quality to me. As I read it a third time, the thoughts and pictures that kept coming to me were like something out a Hunger Games theme - everything is just fine, until you begin to color outside of the lines. Suddenly, then, the picture seems a little plain. Sometimes, the more color you try to add, the more colorless life becomes around you.

I love the way this piece really engaged my mind. I tend to "interpret" outside of the box, but that is just my take on the writing. Well done. Greatly enjoyed this!!!!

[Fanicia E.]

Thank you, I appreciate it. It's always nice to have a unique perspective, and i find yours very interesting!

[Poetic License]

Aw, I'm so glad. You know the saying...give her an inch.... yeah. That is so applicable to me and my "gotta find a hidden meaning in an ad for Cheerios."

[Fanicia E.]

lol i get it

[Shash]

So f*****g awesome, feel like I can really relate to it.
Enjoy the metaphor about Technicolor turning into black and white. The static and walking dead gives it a futuristic dystopian atmosphere.

[Fanicia E.]

Thank you! I wrote this soon after seeking treatment for depression, and I wanted to put in terms those without depression can relate to, since it can be hard to understand for certain people