Passageway speaks today.

Stick it deep into the midnight.
Explosions will answer with your response.
I might like it, I might not.
It's maybe not maybe so what I want.

For the scenery to shout back at me, with jagged teeth.
It's beautiful to see.

Looking down to the point again.
Of what I wrote, it makes me choke.
I might like it, I might not.
It's maybe so maybe not what I want.

To cast this cloak on the resting.
Never to look again.
The arresting grip of empathy.
Walks along the side.
Waiting for it's chance to die.

For the scenery to shout back at me, with jagged teeth.
It's beautiful to see.
The iced up expression in your eyes, says it all.
It's beautiful to see.

I got through to you.
Between the barrier of past, and remembrance.
I got to you, deep.
Like the door will always answer when you come late.
With a creek.

I listen to the reverberation of my defamation of character.
It's eating it's wearer and haunting it's bearer, twisting character.
In the midnight, where the explosions don't like you.
Where I don't like it, and I can't tell if you do.

That's my passage into this world you're tearing down.
She's not the criminal invading my temple.
One day you'll remember the burn again.
That puts you in.
The grave again.

So let it go.
And you sold my soul.
Now I wait in the midnight.
Walking along the side.
Waiting for this to die.

For the scenery to shout back at me, with jagged teeth.
It's beautiful to see.
The iced up expression in your eyes, says it all.
It's beautiful to see.
I got through to you.
Between the barrier of past, and remembrance.
I got to you, deep.
Like the door will always answer when you come late.
With a creek.

Reviews

[KieraCrimeScene]

wow. this is really powerful. I like this alot. Great job! You really gave emotion and feeling. When ever i write, i am afraid to use the same word in the next line. I always think it will sound bad, but you proved that wrong.

I listen to the reverberation of my defamation of character.
It's eating it's wearer and haunting it's bearer, twisting character.

This is really great. I can't wait to see more!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Sorry it wook me so long to review this. Really powerful words. Great Write.

[Cassandra]

once again .. your poems knock me on my @$$. Great write Lee.. really. I feel anger in this .. and hurt and fighting but delicately weaved with your repetitions and rhyme.

I listen to the reverberation of my defamation of character.
It's eating it's wearer and haunting it's bearer, twisting character.
In the midnight, where the explosions don't like you.
Where I don't like it, and I can't tell if you do.

...LOVED this stanza immensely. Arguments.. which is what I thought this poem might be about.. really can eat away at your zest. I liked the opening stanza too,

I might like it, I might not.
It's maybe not maybe so what I want. .. i like the unsure feelings of your tripped up words. I thought this was a very well crafted piece full of emotion but not "in yo face" emotion. Ya gotta dig a bit for it and it's one of the things I like about your writing.

[Gary H]

For me, and knowing you like repetitions, I'm surprised that you had not chosen to write this in again -
'So let it go.
And you sold my soul.
Now I wait in the midnight.
Walking along the side.
Waiting for this to die.'
I think if I had written this, I would have used this stanza as, not only the opening stanza, but also perhaps again used a total of three times.
Maybe you should think about just using the same lines in diferent contexts or order to see what is revealed. Might be an interesting experiment.

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Wow u've been writing alot l8ly!!!
I really like this piece...u should totaly be published!!!