a Mad-Mind-Made; Part II: History of Writing ;)

Umm lots of ideas, nothing good!

i climb up and rhyme this down, right down my mad mind//i write it down right now in one line//nothing of mine is overwritten take a breath and a bow to the town//seems fast when i spit it//like visions of a past i regretted//but oh wait wait//i was just kidding//at the beginning//what a waste of time i admit it//all my rhymes were prewritten//even before English was set-in//or that Britain was Britain//before the birth of christ or al9300dish was given//suffice to tell ya even before we started sinning, and pretending we don't listen//i mean we hear ya but don't listen//we attempting to paint pics we wanna see and live in// but instead we stain these clean slates they used to glisten//we insist on love of hate//now it's all gone to waste//we were innocent wolves, in this sinful world of lambs//hey, god-damned uncle Sam, why the war what's my crime?/ ok how long's my time//look, it's tea time clock says five no one arrests me//when i'm mad i eat a lot so don't distress me//don't have me tested or pissed at you//you might then be listed on my black-menu//i'll chop your head how can you then continue?//you can't press me off, got what i'm pointing to?//or want me to turn the wolf mode off, and set me to a lamb too!//my nonsense rhymes  more corny than you can feel//speaking of my rhymes, they were prewritten even before, this evil w***e, have bitten me//way back in time//when we had no you and I//"we" had it all now you had it coming//you got me humming i'm only '5' minutes early coming//one to three for five, I've survived lots of lost fights, i can fight those who connive//strive to strike, strike to win, then thrive like a beehive but without wax in//so bad like a darkened sin //i'm as healthy as a snack but as deadly as a snake//it doesn't make sense but who cares for what does it make//how about (i'm as healthy as a snack but giving you nightmares, deathly track deadly attack now you wishin you weren't here//too late for that, but hey as long as honey is sweet and the sky is under my feet//I'll be okay//as long as sky's blue i won't break, strong i stay//oh i think i have a pain-ache! i sink and turn to wreck

 evil scored one more time//it's not even but alright, we still winning in the end god-willing, hell or heaven is the prize//i spark once again, my chin is up ,my plaque is amazing, i improvise//god, i faith in//Earth's on fire, all black  screwed up as an entire//now dark forces retire// but the damn dart of cupid hit me, stupid sniper i wish that that missed me..........i'm only 'two' feet away from falling, would you save me?

Reviews

[Norma M Sutton]

Oddly enough this DOES make sense. Nicely written although it takes some getting use to the format you are using.

[Robin]

one hell of a love poem ~

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

stunningly flawless rhythmic surreal streaming~